Player Comments on Terra Proxima: First Strike

Very impressive :)

This was a storygame that I found myself immensely enjoying as I read. I liked that it never felt like there was a sense of urgency in the narrative, everything for the most part was both cohesive and written well, giving this story a rather nice flow to things.

The action was superb, being innovative and a bit refreshing with the system that was in place. At least in my opinion because I genuinely find things with sci-fi elements to be cool when done well, and this story does pull off many things well. The universe feels original and it's obvious that plenty of thought was put into making it so.

A good use of pictures, strategy, and writing certainly made this a rather immersive and fun experience.

My only gripe with this is that it ended when things really were picking it up :( But that fact certainly makes me excited to play a continuation of this storygame, as this was definitely enjoyable to read.

Overall, I think that this was a solid piece of writing.

This game requires a lot of honesty.

I am not an honest person, after the first time I cheated my way through.

Still very fun in concept and a throwback to the old gamebooks, but I'm not sure it works as more than a brief curiosity. What I mean is that picking numbers off the random number table and recording ammo and HP by hand might be interesting in theory, but realistically most people are going to cheat. And if the author wanted to prevent cheating, the editor has built in ways to track all these things without leaving it up to the player's honesty.

The writing isn't hugely exciting but it's serviceable given that this is more of a mechanics focused game anyway. And it has been around the site for an impressively long time.

cool

Very nice! Although some spelling mistakes but that doesn't really matter

Cool concept. Don't like having to keep track of things myself. Writing isn't great either.

Amazing game story??

great

I'd like to play more story games like this. Well thought out, well written, and it has a realistic feel. Plus the science fiction aspect is interesting.

MAN ARMY LIFE IS BRUTAL

Fun, innovative, and always an interesting read! You have a lot of writing skill and practice. Enough to make me want to play this game (and its sequel) a second time through just to see what else I can do.
8/8

The scenario was well-thougt out. It bring about an atmosphere of tactical, practical choices. I will use it as a source of subquests for my tabletop gamemastering session :)

Nice.

I really liked how the results were driven by specific choices

would have liked more explanation of the troop movement techniques before having to make a choice of tactics (what exactly is a skirmish line, etc)

Loved it excellent job ever need ideas or someone to test it let me know :D

Interesting combat and game mechanics. Wish it was a little less action packed and contained more character depth/interaction, but that's just my personal taste.

Love it, keep up the good work

Probably the best sci fi story out there! I wish there was more of it!

Really fun, and I loved the stat based/ random number playstyle. Can't wait for part 2!

I liked this! It was annoying at first to keep track of your own stuff, but I did it anywho :D Nice game!^_^

Exiting and engaging. Great Writing

Not bad... a bit technical, not enough story/character dev but good fight scenes! clunky inventory/stat system is bad though

My brain is going to blow up. That was really complicated and too long but it was cool and creative.

good.

keep donig these

too short

I really liked this game, despite it's faults. Sure, the inventory was annoying, and the random number table even more so, but it reminded me of the books.

I liked that.

Very good story all around, although it could have used a good proof read before hitting the printers (so to speak). I love the military scenarios and branching battle paths.

I would have much preferred a scripted inventory though.

It was interesting. I enjoyed the plotline, it was fresh, but some of the content felt like it came from Star Wars or Halo. The writing could've been much better. Although I know grammar isn't the most important thing, it sure helps the flow. I would hit your story with a thesaurus pretty hard and find some different words to replace with reoccurring ones.

That was AWESOME! I love it! I accidentally clicked the wrong link. I'll have to play this again. Amazing story. 8/8

5 stars

too short T_T

Pros:
Writing
military scenarios
details
game mechanics- this is truly a game

Cons:
couldn't you have scripted or itemized the story at least somewhat so I wouldn't have to keep track of every little variable myself?
combat maps are confusing
not long/epic enough

D; 4-1 ? I could take em. IT CALLED SPRAY AND PRAY!
*sighs*

You need a sniper in there, and some nades for the cluster of elites lol. Here are my final stats:
Item 1:Plasma pistol

Item 2:52 credz

Item 3:Plasma infantry rifle

Item 4:17 plasma riflecartarges (one shot)

Item 5:Plasma carbine

Item 6:

Item 7:

Item 8:

Dogtags:
Squad Ldr. "Nightstalker"

Health: 5/17

Marksmanship:9 + 2 (11)

Sharpshooter

...Apparently I hadn't left a review before...
Well, it's a good excuse to replay this gem! The combat is really superb, and makes the combat more than just "Do this or die." A cool conflict, although there isn't a whole lot of backstory which would have been nice, and some great combat and writing. Excellent game, Rommy!

Now THAT...was really, really good. I love the classic style of record sheet and random number table. Makes it feel authentic. The detail and backstory in this piece is absolutely top notch and captured the heart-pounding, dangerous battle side of war as well as the personal side. There's too much to say. Love it Love it Love it Love it Love it.

I think the combat system is superb. The story is really well developed, and I like the charachters.It just needs to be a little longer.

Wow, definatly your best work. However, I do wish there were more pictures that just maps. Also, it could have been better if it would have been longer.

This game only came in 3rd? This is one of the best games on the site! 8/8! Excellent work Rommel!

Hi! I realised I'd played the game, but not left comments. I really liked this one. Your writing style is getting better with each story you write, so I look forward to your next one as well :)

Amazingly long and very good. This is your cream of the crop in all your stories. Good work!

i thought it was very well thought out...good

Great, Rommel. Close to being the best on the site at the moment. I really liked it, and how you implemented everything. I'm looking forward to more!

Hm, not bad not bad.

well, i can tell you put alot of effort into it. some depth and creativity are shown here. im glad you incorporated the numbers chart like the lone wolf stories. only downside, some of the organization of paragraphs and such were sloppy. but only some.

Good job, rommel. I'm kind of surprised.

Very fun, although way too short for my taste. I enjoyed your writing.