Player Comments on The Blackwood Chronicles: Heist

I'm a stickler for immersiveness in a storygame, so I found this hard to dig because of certain things that were entirely unrealistic (eg. the police not arriving at the bank for over an hour, Shades entrusting the most important part of his plan to a "mindless" henchman etc.). You also switched into past tense a few times during the story (nothing huge, just the odd sentence here and there).

I particularly liked your present-tense style of writing and the Home Alone-style plans enacted by Bryce. I wasn't bored by this storygame but its lack of realism stifled my enjoyment.

I loved this story! I was a bit confused, since I hadn't read the other Blackwood Chronicles book. I was a bit annoyed that you kept saying "BANG!" on virtually every page, just wouldn't have done that, and you would have a 7/8 story!

i love the hero. that is all that a hero needs is just to be home.

Awesome Approves!
Great job. I just now got to leaving a comment. Sadly, this isn't what I'd like to call your best work, but trust me, it's still pretty darn good. I like the Cat-and-Mouse gameplay, and it kept me on my toes (not literally; that'd be too much work) and ready to run. The creative use of items made the story a lot more interesting. The downside was what kept it from being perfect. Yes, we had a bit of dialogue in the story, but I think Bryce didn't get to say anything at all. That leaves us wondering; Who is Bryce? Ed and Shades at least seem to have something interesting going on. Why can't we help them? I think that giving us more insight and dialogue (comedic or not) with the characters would be a huge bump up. Good work, as always.
5/8

Good one!

Great game. I wish it was less linear but still a great job.

Nice story. 6/8. Could easily be a serie. Keep it up!

Interesting story, decently written, and a nice length and difficulty. All in all, I enjoyed it. 6/8.

Better than 'Abduction'!

Very good game, as good as the aquarium one

Some of the scenes reminded me of Home Alone :)

so awesome!!!!!!!!!

NICE!@

That was really fun! There was a huge variety of options that kept the game fresh!
Awesome Approves!!!****:):):):):)8/8

Too hard and long. But JMgskills is awesome so...yeah. I gave it a 5.

Brilliant, finally a newish game thats good that wasn't made my me lol. I really hope you keep writing. Only thing is it annoyed me that I was called bruce. Think bruce should have told people about what happened though. Anyway very good.

You put quite a bit of effort into this, and for that I commend you. Not only that, but your writing was much better than most new adventures.

However, there were still issues both with the writing and how the interactivity worked out, not to mention that the long pages made it annoying to retrieve multiple items.

Still, pretty good job.

never make a game where you can die after two links. However it was better than timescape

Nice, not as good as star wars: a padawans journey
but good

Not only can you die after two pages. You put extra spaces to make it look long, and it was really boring and mostly chance, but you also rated my crappy game a 1 (so what if it deserved that) so it's payback time

It's a decent story, but you obviously just put a space after every line to make it look like your pages were longer. All that made me do was scroll down more to get items :P

nice

IT was well written and seemed to be life like. I do one thing and another thing was going to happen. Nice work. Keep it up!

7/8

Fun story :)

Great game and good job on the short character development.
So when will you make your next story?

(spoiler)--> I was suprised that the kid didn't talk to the police at the end though.<--(spoiler end)

Pretty good. Nice use of items, and quiet a realistic death. But then again, a little bit more story and character building then that would give it an 8. Nice first story.