Player Comments on The Bus of Doom

So let me just recap- you, the Only Sane Man, boards a bus and everything is trying to kill you. It would be good, if most links wasn't a death link!

This method of writing is extremely cheap in the world of CYOA, with nothing to tell you what's going to happen, you are just lending yourself at the mercy of the author. How were you supposed to know that the fat bastard was getting a sandwich? The game that the psycho try to play is stabbing you? The squirrel having a shotgun? You are allergic to mayo? HOW DOES EATING MAYO MAKES YOU EXPLODE?!

This type of game can be better if it was a Flash game, take Puffballs United games for example, it has the same method of insta-death links like this one, having animations that makes it actually worthwhile to watch and replay, in fact, these types of games are the most highly rated in Newgrounds, the idea won't be so good if it was made into text. What this adventure tries to achieve.

It is hard to improve on a CYOA that tries to imitate a actual game. My only recommendation would be just leave it here and work on another story that tones down the amount of death links, improving the length and quality of the game overall, while making it less linear.

4/10

Wow. This was bad. This'll prolly hurt me more than it'll hurt you, but this was a pretty crappy game, even for first games. This was the epitome of linear story tree. I literally alternated from selecting the two choices. And with only a total of 6 stops, this was pretty bad. The story was too random to enjoy. Like, I know it was supposed to be random, but believe me, this is crap.
Sorry, dude. 2/8; This would be a 1/8, but I always rate games with a 2 or higher if their a first game.

I'm giving it a 4/8. Cause I had a fun random time with it, it was pretty easy however, I didn't die once, I kid you not. The choices were for the most part logical and for me in the end it payed off. Maybe you should make like a sequel, but make different "stops" you can get off at, to continue the story, doesn't have to have multiple endings, just different paths to give it replay value. ;)

It was pretty terrible... But actually slightly less terrible than I expected. I think this game goes towards the higher end of the "Lol, totes so RANDOM!" genre because, hey, at least nobody farted. And I guess I can't really complain about spelling and grammar either, so congratulations on making a game that's ever so slightly higher than deletion worthy.

Still, I can only rate a game so high, when it's pretty much just six pages of "Guess which choice doesn't make you die!" ... 4/8

O.o This is weird. It was fun, but.. HOLY MOLL.

Way too short

Lol brilliant

Was too short. 4/8

Eh... It's funny i guess, but it's really easy. Try to add more length next time.

Just no...

Hehe, I lived. Great story. Funny.

Great. I was shot by a squirrel.

Ok...

Eh... kinda funny but it is pretty short.

...that went well.

HAHAHAHHAHAHAHAH funny

The idea of surviving until the bus gets to the last stop is an interesting one, but this game really could do with more words and detail to flesh it out.

This was terrible

Yikes.

ummm random but random is awesome so i liked this

I could see where this might have been a funny story, if you had gone on more with the randomness, but with a linear story and lack of description, I was glad to get off the bus at the end.

pretty easy to lose, interesting game.

What kind of game is this?

Way. Too. Short. I made like 3 decisions and then it told me i won. It could be WAY better if you had a) more detail and b) longer

So liniar. Though very funny. Too much fat!

It was funny, wish it was longer

Not all fat explode.

Lol! This is silly. I like it! ^_^

This made me giggle. A bit funny, nt meant to be taken seriously. Sure, could be better but it's not HORRIBLE.

Funny

Seriously how can you die from losing your finger... you would have the bus driver locate the emergency kit while you put pressure on it... really plain old crap

Meh, it was okay but pictures or more descriptions would be better.

that was crap

It was enjoyable. There was a interesting kind of humor in the story, haha. But yes, fun.

I won! I love random by the way, Bo approves

WTF THAT WAS AN AMAZING STORY!!!!!!!

random. never do random stuff. ever. 2/8

lol short and funny

It is an ok short game. It was very random.

aha, I won

Too random, no sense of satisfaction from the choices I make

not bad for a first game, try fleshing out the details

slighty more fun than homework

wow this is hilarious.who'd ever heard of a bus hijacking squirrel.

5/8. Interesting concept. Maybe, instead of ending the game when you die, restart.

Interesting for a first game. You might want to incorporate more options and branch them out so that you will get a longer story. Don't include too many death pages!

Very interesting idea.

Lol, like everyone said this is really linear, but it's pretty good for a first story. Your writing style is clean and I laughed out loud when fatty exploded part of the bus. Write some more.

I realise that the story was intended to be humorous, but it's really frustrating to try and read a story only to get two sentences and a lame punchline. I'd rather read the washing directions on my underwear.

It is short and linear, but you have a very good imagination. I'd like you to expand on this, as I really enjoyed it, but it didn't last that long.

Squirrels can hijack buses? Sorry, but linearity is an issue.

It's too short. Try making to longer, with 20 bus stops or something.

too short other that its good

It's an interesting idea- but way too short and lacking any real storyline.

Umm...ok for your first story. the randomness, while funny at times was mostly not funny. And it's too short. 3/8. Good luck with your next game.