Player Comments on The Cliche Adventures of a Generic Hero

- "The wintry winds howl a horrible wail, whipping white watery snow against the weathered watchtower’s westernmost wall." Boom! What a first sentence. The reader could choose not to read the description and instantly guess the kind of story you're going for here. I absolutely love a good mish mash of fantasy and humour, and this just grabs cliche tropes by the fistful, picks up a big ol' literary baseball bat, and smashes words into something really entertaining. Brilliant.

-"B. E. A. Utiful." Bruce Almighty fan by any chance? ERODING!!

- The humour is pretty spot on and comes in a load of different forms. There's witty dialogue, description, word play, narrator interaction, and that all adds to the surreal pseudo-fantasy setting.

- One of the very few mistakes I found was: " You lash you with your legs, catching Jon in the chest." This story has clearly had lots of time and effort put into it, and is practically flawless in terms of grammar and spelling. That's an impressive feat for a story over 28K words. Most of the stories here are a fraction of the size and still have a plethora of mistakes. It's more of an achievement than anything to have so few mistakes, and that lends itself to reading well.

- Despite the size, I felt the endings were a little abrupt. The whole thing could have gone on for a bit longer, but I think that's mainly because there's so much branching and I wanted it to keep going, so it's not really an issue. Besides, it's not a serious story, so it doesn't need to let the reader down slowly. I would really like to see the other character arcs at the start of the story and think that would give this story loads of replay value.

- The characters were great and the dialogue was snappy and kept well to the flow, even in the action scenes (not always an easy thing to do).

Yeah, I just really enjoyed this and look forward to reading more of your stuff. A very solid 6/8.

This should be required reading for anyone who wants to make a fantasy cyoa. I do not want to oversell this but it was hillarious. A genre lampoon that could only come from a true fan, fully self aware and reveling in tropes and tired convention. From the very first and repeated "DODGE" to the subtle and not so subtle nods at hostility towards women, objectification, and sexual wish fulfillment that you can find in most genre works- a pointed and uproarious look through both an objective lens and an insiders observations. I wish I could give it more than an 8. In fact, I'm pretty sure all it's flaws (if any) are intentional, and the beauty is any that are not would be completely wrapped in the premise and only make this better. It's certainly not an attempt at veiled jest. If you were already aware of these genre faults you will find this a spot on parody, and if you weren't pay attention and soon you won't be able to read stories the same way. This story comes crashing through the fourth wall taking the entire fantasy form, cyoa in general, and the reader with it; never stopping to apologize and never needing to.

Fun story! I played all the paths, and you nail the comic tone. I think it would have been funnier without breaking the fourth wall in a few places, though, particularly the overt references to other media. But it's engaging and written in a technically solid, immersive style, so nice work!

I liked this very much, and I would love to see the other paths be implemented eventually

I laughed out loud at some parts. I think you have a good grasp about comedic timing in stories. From the very beginning, you sold me on the humor with some clever tricks. In the first page you had the option to choose from different types of characters to play as, except the game already made that choice for you; a heroic knight! This gag in the end later comes back as bonus content which makes the joke even funnier in hindsight.

These were my favourite lines when the hero faces of a mad sorceror:

"Once I extract your blood, I can complete my master plan.”

“Which is?”

“World domination.”

“You seem to be doing pretty well without my blood.”

You also made some clever use of running gags, for example the "dodge is the only tactic" joke and the fertilizer jokes all land surprisingly well. It also prevented the story from being a "lol random" story by having clear albeit idiosyncratic rules in the world. The dodge joke is not just some gag, but also a way how the fighting mechanics in this game works. The dumb potion seller who turned out to be an evil vampire sorceror also comes back at multiple parts of the story.
This kind of continuity makes a story like this a little bit more "vavoom"!
One gripe that I have is that the story is repeatedly breaking the fourth wall. I think that it doesn't really need that aspect and too be honest, I think that it was the weakest part of the story. These jokes just don't hit that hard as the other ones.
On the whole, I very much enjoyed this story, I had even played through the bonus content. I'm so happy I had the option to play a sparkly vampire.

A hilarious abomination.

Uh...okay I see what the authors doing

Good but why can't I play another person

I fucking dodged the dodge that's some insane meta shit right there

Good job on the hilarious story HAHAHAHA loved every part of it

Now THIS is REAL fantasy...

Never more had I been impressed by a parody of the all-too-common soldier-clad-in-thick-chrome with a princess story.

One thing that bothers me though, Bucky. You said the bandit leader was the only black guy, but what about the ebony princess? Surely ebony is synonymous with black as well!

Inconsistency aside, this story shows just how talented the mind behind the writing is. Moral lesson: Keep ideas stashed away until they pop up, groinkick you to inspirational levels of testosterone and guide you in composing a commendation-worthy storygame.

And that is exactly what this is. Colorful detailed characters meshed with dialogue and situations that show REAL fantasy is a far cry from DOCTORED fantasy.

Absolutely grand work. May cents shower on thy head. 6/8.

Ha! This is brilliant! A wonderful parody of of the fantasy genre, and the content is, shall I say, far fuller than it first appears. Will be playing again tomorrow, this time with a different path.

8/8

Simply awesome.

It was quite good, I ended up naming the servant Lady Fair, and it worked out quite well for me :D

Dark elves for life!!!

That has to be the best read I've had in a long time. I've followed all the endings I could find, even laughed aloud a couple of times and enjoyed the whole experience. Great stuff!

Can't believe I only just now got around to reading this. Funny stuff. I need to go back and pick some other choices.

Funny as Fuck! Awesome as Fuck! 7 Points, would read again.

This is a heroic, classic, heart-warming, ridiculous, rampant --dare I say spoony?-- story. Half of the things I just typed are true.
Your humor is on point and the writing is just hilarious to read, I really wouldn't mind a second installment.
And the best part is that its all canon!

Fun story, lots of humor.

really good game. I found it to be a very nice story, can't wait to see the other paths!

My god this story got me laughing out loud at some points. Good job on this story, please write more of this, it was very fun to play!

A cliched comment on a cliched good storygame. Good job Author, you have expressed the plot very well for having a cliched game. The characters were splendid to play as. As for some cliched crticism, maybe if you made the story longer, it would be even better. So I give you a cliched rating of a 6/8.

I now regret not reading this earlier. Good humour, no grammatical mistakes, succinct and logical. A perfect package of knighthood and princess bosom.7/8

This game was amusing and short. I only played until I got to the end. I was happy to have finished the game and receive my point. Then, I noticed I had logged off before I closed this window.

I bet you can't guess which member is actually me. ;)

Funny, and I liked all the branching paths :) Somehow you managed to pull it off. I laughed a few times- now my family thinks I'm crazy X3

i saw all the endings and it was fun. you should make a part 2 if you haven't already. although, i would've liked being a saiyan.

This is great- I'd love to read the other paths.
I'm usually skeptical of intentionally humorous stories, and I pretty much don't find gratuitously crude moments amusing, but this genuinely made me laugh out loud.

lol! lol! lol-tacular!

You should totally make the rest of the storylines!

I just wish the other ones would unlock if you win without making a deal with the dragon, and even then they don't work properly. Otherwise great job!

This was very well written and interesting. There were a few moments that made me smile like fighting with your severed arm. And also good use of alliteration.

lol, I've read this before. Awesome story, and I like that I was able to use my severed arm to fight with.

Meh, the humor was just shoved down your throat so it kinda just lessens it.

This is definitely one of the best stories I've ever read. I lost my shit laughing at the total absurdity of several pages. Funny, pretty well-written, and even the dead ends can be a real treat (or the stuff of nightmares, beware the leprechauns!). 8/8 from me.

lol so funny, make more please

Well, it earned a 4/8. It was truly cliché, as the title promised.
Also, avoid that WC commentator. She can't even spell!

Good writings. Could use some more improvements. Make it longer if possible.

The fucking bitches line had me cracking up.

can you not play through the wizard and girl storylines

I expected it to be a lot worse, to be honest. With a little improvement of not much in particular, I would rate it 6. 5/8

Very good, some typos but the story was entertaining!