Player Comments on The Flame

A unique and very compelling idea, but the illusion of choice is a bit of a bother. An excuse could be that no matter what path we take we always have a fate lined up for us. That would've been an interesting idea if it had been executed well. Unfortunately it just forces you into taking the option that the author wants you to.

Overall, could be improved greatly upon but I think the concept is great.
-- HJPike on 11/5/2015 3:53:27 AM with a score of 1
Let's just say that a lot of literary analysis had to be done to make the story good. Though, when interpreted into actual text, it is enjoyable, simpler readers will have trouble trying to find any entertainment from this overly simplistic story. I'm not sure if adding descriptions of your surroundings, your characters, and so forth will actually detract from the messages you've oh so cleverly placed in here, but I do suggest not giving your readers a wall of bland text to read.
-- Swiftstryker on 10/9/2013 7:56:57 PM with a score of 1
um ok its useless
-- greyfeather on 8/6/2017 9:29:10 AM with a score of 1
i really liked it....and then the ending. 1/8
-- iansjamsnsnsn on 4/22/2017 7:49:43 AM with a score of 1
I rated a 6. It is very obviously full of some very interesting symbolism, and you are an excellent writer. My only complaint would be that there was not quite enough depth to the story. However, I absolutely look forward to reading more of your work, and you have great potential.
-- LogstertheNewf on 4/21/2017 6:38:28 PM with a score of 1
just...amazing
-- _Lazer on 4/20/2017 3:52:07 PM with a score of 1
An interesting story although I wish the funnel had been wider to start and provided at least the illusion of choice. It could be improved upon but is deserving an honorable mention.
-- march5th00 on 4/20/2017 12:20:52 AM with a score of 1
nice story! would be better tho if u added more choices.but then again it is in progress! keep it up! :)
-- kman on 4/19/2017 8:28:51 AM with a score of 1
Spoiler!!!!! I don't really know what to rate this. It's just one big circle then? What's the point?
-- Quorrah on 1/11/2017 11:00:20 PM with a score of 1
It was a very nice little story. I liked the little twist at the end. In one way, it's kind of sad, but in another, I can't help but marvel at the endless cycle. Really good job. 6/8
-- Shadowulf on 6/15/2016 6:41:33 PM with a score of 1
not unique-there are some storygames that are built on this general line- but very good.
-- . on 6/13/2016 8:05:58 PM with a score of 1
This was good.
-- Rin on 5/14/2016 12:18:32 AM with a score of 1
Do I still need on pretending that this is called The Fire?
-- CurseOfTime on 3/26/2016 3:34:24 PM with a score of 1
Was nicely surprised by this.
Found the story interesting and the writing wasn't overwhelming.
Good Job!
-- Aducan on 8/19/2015 10:22:01 AM with a score of 1
That was good
-- AthenaT on 6/28/2015 2:15:51 AM with a score of 1
It was kind of cool and weird to keep going back to the beginning.
-- Lzark on 6/23/2015 10:46:49 PM with a score of 1
it was weird
-- ok on 6/22/2015 4:49:36 PM with a score of 1
Ahahahahahaha...It took me 7 tries and an hour to realise it was a loop. Hehehe...whoops...
-- Cloudflame on 6/5/2015 3:33:53 PM with a score of 1
This very interesting and unique.
I like to think that this story symbolizes our journey through life. A journey where we will face all kinds of dangers, hurdles, and temptations. I like to think the fire/light signifies either heaven, accomplishment, our goals and dreams, perhaps all three, or simply anything we strive for in life.
This was a short but very good story with a deeper meaning behind its words.
-- Penworth on 5/14/2015 6:18:51 AM with a score of 1
Cool game, weird ending. I enjoyed this!
-- Guest on 12/24/2014 8:25:33 AM with a score of 1
Great Game!!
-- rbf22 on 4/1/2014 2:20:28 AM with a score of 1
This was really good!

And I don't think that there should be a sequel, it was a good "ending" in my opinion.
-- Boringfirelion on 3/3/2014 7:00:29 PM with a score of 1
LEGOS!
-- ISentinelPenguinI on 11/5/2013 9:00:50 PM with a score of 1
It wass intriguing
-- Awakeem on 11/5/2013 8:38:22 PM with a score of 1
pretty good...
-- superwaffles65 on 10/27/2013 8:12:32 PM with a score of 1
Awesome ^_^ I'd love to see a sequel.
-- BobbyParkhurst on 10/21/2013 6:35:22 AM with a score of 1
Wo what?! That's awesome. Interesting. Very interesting. ;3
-- HugsGoodbye on 10/15/2013 12:12:50 AM with a score of 1
Well Done :)
-- BerkaZerka on 10/14/2013 12:18:50 AM with a score of 1
Interesting...
-- Tanstaafl on 10/13/2013 11:32:19 PM with a score of 1
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