The Forlorn

Player Rating3.01/8

"#770 overall, #100 for 2015"
based on 74 ratings since 12/15/2015
played 374 times (finished 58)

Story Difficulty5/8

"run through the jungle"

Play Length2/8

"So short yo' momma thought it was a recipe"

Maturity Level6/8

"I'll need to see some identification"
Some material may be inappropriate for persons under age 16. If this were a movie, it would probably between PG-13 and R.

Nature has reclaimed everything. The few humans left are no longer the dominant race. Deadly hothas roam the land. And skaves eat anything you try to keep. How will you survive? Updated to include descriptions.

Player Comments

While interesting, it was very short. This is a very neat world you have created, and a good one to expand on. I would recommend having some artwork and other things.
-- ArtsyGirl38 on 1/28/2020 9:59:33 AM with a score of 0
The setup is quite short, but a little intriguing. I don’t know what a hotha is, nor a skave, but perhaps I shall learn. In any case, I am prepared to survive and see what happens (or, quite more likely, I shall die quickly).

I do like how the story starts out with action and adventure! I also liked the background link to help me understand what’s going on a little more. It might be nice if that small wall of text were broken up into paragraphs to make it more readable, but at least it has good, detailed information that is useful to me as the reader. However, I’m not sure if that first page really gives me a clue as to my best course of action… but I see that it did. I like that there was not an instant death there at the start for not picking the best option.

Beyond that portion, the story felt very short. I do realize that the more options you put in the story, the more words you have to write to get a longer story. In this case I think the story started out quite well, had a good setting, and lots of great options. But after the first conflict with the hotha, there was not much story left: nothing really happened. Yes, there was one path that was a bit longer, again with a number of good options, but most of the paths were very short. Of course, as expected, they pretty much all lead to untimely deaths, but that would be expected in a story in this setting. I did manage to find the ending where I found a city and get elected mayor (well, okay, maybe not that successful, but it did say it was the only good ending).

Overall, this is a nice story. It has quality punctuation and grammar. It has some action and adventure. As with many others, I just wish it was longer and a few more things happened during the story. Thank you for sharing this one with the site.
-- Ogre11 on 6/4/2019 6:29:45 PM with a score of 0
Meh. Like most stories on this site, it could have been improved with an actual backstory, more character development, and more of a plot.
Still, not bad, and certainly not the worst game here.
-- crazygurl on 6/17/2017 7:12:00 PM with a score of 0
Great until my nomadic ass got eaten! Haha!
-- Quorrah on 1/22/2017 9:36:56 PM with a score of 0
Not much really happens. There's some branching out, but there's not really a plot, or setting or anything. I mean, I enjoy the multiple choices, but it simply doesn't click for me. I made no meaningful choices, I just... did what I was supposed to.
-- Steve24833 on 12/16/2015 11:22:08 AM with a score of 0
It could be longer, I noticed a few spelling errors here and there. Other than that, good work!
-- Zaguiza14 on 12/7/2015 2:39:14 AM with a score of 0
I got the best ending.

(Crawl for the Cave)
-- TheBossWriter on 11/9/2015 4:12:33 PM with a score of 0
This game is ok but there is no good ending please make one so I can win instead of dying and there is a loop at the end of the game.
Why is that the name of it anyway?
-- Mynameisjeff on 5/26/2015 2:58:40 PM with a score of 0
My game now includes descriptions of the places and animals
-- Beardon87 on 5/19/2015 11:03:11 AM with a score of 0
This story game was a true masterpiece. Very exquisite, and dazzling.
-- KommanderK9 on 5/19/2015 11:01:17 AM with a score of 0
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