Player Comments on The Fox and The Fawn

Awesome Storyline & Plot (it really showed that ye put a lot of time, effort, & imagination into it). The story was so addicting that it made me want to keep reading (I chose the Fox Clan).

The bad parts of it though is that ye misspelled many words & some words had letters missing from them so a reader could understand what the word was meant to be, but shouldn't have to need to do that. I did not see any noticeable problems with grammar.

I rated it a 7 out of 8 (Mostly because of the story/plot & the informative background & descriptions. Though ye lost a point because of the many spelling errors).

Overall, it's a great work & I wouldn't be surprised if ye soon became a featured writer on here. Keep up the great work!

This was terrific.

As a story this was well-written, creative and detailed and as a game there were enough path branches and puzzles to interest and test the reader. The relationships were well-handled and the ending perfectly suited the reader's choices, all these little things adding up to a terrific story.

Animal Fiction has become a much-maligned genre on this site so it's good to have an example of how it can produce an excellent story-game in the hands of a talented author. 8/8.

I only played one of the paths, but from what I've seen it is a very good story. There were very few grammatical errors (maybe two or three in the path I took) and the story itself was great. I like how you gave us a second chance to not go back through the hole as I have a very sensitive mouse which tends to screw up clicking things. This story has received the Phoenix stamp of approval. Good job.

SO GOOD! I loved the heck out of this. With the different paths and everything, it's so so fun. Recommended to anyone :)

Great story!

My only qualms are that this is much too short and that it's either fox or fawn. This could be so interesting if there were multiple animals to choose from.

It's an interesting premise. The idea of the story itself felt far ahead of the writing quality though. Take that as a compliment or as constructive criticism, maybe a bit of both. It felt like every 2 out of 3 sentences began with "you." It's an easy trap to fall into, but it turns into a show & tell without the show. While this is no means a bottom tier storygame, there is much more I would like to see. A good start would be with unique characters and more diverse sentence structure.

Really neat, it would be awesome if you added a sequel or a RPG or even add more animals possible to turn into. This would also be a great chance for some artwork.

Great story and well written.

It has a very interesting premise and I enjoyed it a lot. The training in the fawn clan seemed a bit cliche/stereotypical, but honestly I loved the trial/journey and the message at the end of the tunnel!

This was an amazing story. In fact, I spent the time to complete every path for both factions.

The only issues I came across were a few typos, but nothing serious.

I liked it

so romantic

so romantic

I believe I played this game a year or 2 ago as a member of the Fawn clan. I decided to try out the fox clan this time. The “right” options are way too obvious, and the pacing is way too fast.

so romanntic

SO ROMANTIC, SO ADVENTUROUS, SO COOL, AND SO AWESOME. I LOVED IT, IT WAS SO GREAT IT IS MY FAVORITE ONE OF YOUR STORYGAMES GRACIE98. IT WAS FAN-FLIPPIN'TASTIC.

BEST game on this web site so far

SO ROMANTIC AT THE VERY END. LOVED IT, THANKS TO WHOEVER CREATED IT AND MAKING THIS A FUN STORY GAME.

It was a sweet story. >.< Can we get a part two? maybe when they can have kids or a new war comes in? Still a great read :3

I LOVED it!!! - made me cry... LOL

This was a really good story. The plot was very creative (if a bit cliche at times) but it was more than interesting enough to make me keep reading. There was a good amount of branching as well so I'm keen to go back and have a look at some of the other paths. There were some typos in there but they were sparse enough that they didn't impede the writing in any way. Overall I really enjoyed reading!

Wow! That was a beautiful thing! <3

Great game, I loved the story, and seeing the conflict, epilogue, and other things about this plot have helped to make it a good story. I wish that it wasn't so generic though, but I think you were trying to make this like a classic story with love, and a person finding a new world, which I certainly enjoyed.

This was a great story. Good job creater of the story. My boredom was cured.

I really like this story and it flows really good. Though, I did expect it to be longer and there to be more choices. I like the romance going on, but I feel like it was rushed and would have done better later on in the story. This was an amazing story and was totally worth the time.

I'm somewhat disappointed that you can't choose your gender but, It's still very enjoyable.

Awsome!

I played through the first time never using the 'Go Back' button and got the 'Fawn Bride' ending. I enjoyed this so much I've now played through every possible Fawn clan ending. It's hard to say which one is my favorite, a lot of them are really good! My top three would be 'Star Head' 'Lady Fawn' and either 'Killer Queen' or 'Fawn Bride' in no particular order. Next I'll do a complete play through of the fox clan and then find all the other fox clan endings.

THIS. WAS. EPIC!!!

I'm just saying! This is by far one of the best story ever!

Interesting story, but it seemed like there was very few choices and that some things just happened out of the blue. Such as (Spoiler) the main character becoming the leader of the fox army immediately after almost winning a fist fight with a dude that had yet to promoted to any position of power

OMG i love it i cryed and thats how sweet it was to me i love the fox clan and it was wunderful

7/8
I'm impressed with this stories writing excellence and I think it was portrayed really well, even though the concept was a little weak, but I still liked the idea. The characters were realistic and formed well. It was a little hard between some choices but I managed. The spelling and grammar was fine. Great job!

A really good story, I liked the storybook feel and the fact that all of my decisions were logically followed. It is refreshing to read a story where the consequences of your decisions aren't just random, they make total sense. 6/8.

This is a pretty awesome game! Good job!

Very good descriptions and story, but the writing can be a bit awkward, especially when it comes to dialogue. Try to avoid having the characters say exactly what they are thinking. It adds more layers to them that way. 5/8. GG

Amazing game. the writing id long, but the content is good. it can be read by most people. thank you for this game!

Great story. Overall there is alot of effort put into it. However, I feel disappointed by the lack of choices, esp. in the Fawn Clan.

My ending was pretty sad...in a beautiful way.

BEST GAME EVER!!

This was a really good story with a good length, solid characters, and many options. Keep writing.