Player Comments on The game master

World...WORST GAME. *dies on first page*

You put some effort into this which is good. I didn't understand the situations, the riddles, the character's acceptance of a strange semi-French speaker who seemed a bit like Jigsaw from the Saw movies except for children. A lot of your puns weren't puns but I guess the humour might appeal to some people... it was a rather confusing jumble but not as bad as some stuff the site's been getting lately :)

You bolt awake, startled to find yourself not in your bedroom, but in a padded cell with corny cat posters and crummy puns. Suddenly, you hear a crackling come from the top of the room.

At first, I thought it said Porno cat posters....

This isn't the best. It seemed quite linear, as there was only one thing that I could do without failing on each page. This is supposed to be Choose Your Story, not Follow My Story Or Fail. I liked the puns, however, I would like more of a background. I was sort of confused. Why was I even in this room, and why was a given cakes? Not bad for your first, I guess.

It was decent compared to some of what I read, but the grammar mistakes, general length, and the fact that there is technically no way to really win brought this down a few pegs. Okay scratch that, a lot of pegs.

You've only been here a day, there's no reason to rush a story out. You wind up with a very very short one full of punctuation and spelling errors, like this one, when you do.

A little too much on the 'random' side for my tastes, but the writing was decent enough I'm betting you could manage something interesting when you decide to sit down and put some work into a real story.

Also, Portal jokes? In 2016? Come on now.

Well written, funny at points, but just general randomness.
I'd say for your first story, this wasn't too bad, although some sense of what was going on, would've been appreciated.
4/8