The Lonely Wolf
Love & Dating
"Too few ratings to be ranked"
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"run through the jungle"
"So short yo' momma thought it was a recipe"
Some material may be inappropriate for persons under age 18. If this were a movie, it would probably be R.
You get separated from your family and get accepted into a new pack called Midnight Clan. Choose Wisely. This time there are actually choices. I hope you like this one.
Okay. Sum of the story:
You have literally no choices.
It is way too short.
A sex scene? Please, no.
Please work on this....
on 3/7/2019 7:15:55 PM with a score of 0
-- Moon on 4/18/2018 2:43:30 PM with a score of 0
that was really bad things!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
-- none of your bee wax on 10/23/2017 7:38:51 PM with a score of 0
Try improving on your writing skills, and also consider NOT starting every sentence with "You are."
on 7/25/2017 7:25:05 PM with a score of 0
First of all, I noticed some grammar mistakes, like instead of the Tribe, you put he Tribe. This needs to be edited.
Second, the humping at the end was embarrassing!How you described it was inappropriate. Yes, I know this is a natural behavior for dogs and wolves, but it just gets disturbing.
Third,you get taken by the Tribe and you meet a she wolf and sleep with her. Then it goes straight to the mating page. There is not much character development. I don't really feel attached to the characters in the story. Not even the she wolf.
Forth, this is much too short. You should've did something like, you go hunting with your love, and fight beside her. You should really make this longer. How can she just accept being your mate. I really should take effort to be her mate.
Fifth, the mating was off. A good wolf story has more to it then mating. Stuff like hunting, marking borders, fighting, death, to make you feel the emotions. Make more to this then mating.
Sixth, you really didn't have a choice for a mate. I tried the Alpha Female, and she didn't accept. There has got to be more than one female to choose from.
on 3/29/2016 9:57:15 PM with a score of 0
Wolves are my favorite animal, and I love love stories, so these two together were really fun.
on 12/30/2015 9:30:52 PM with a score of 0
The Icesteal ending was... uh... yeah. *Scarred, once again, by the internet*
Wasn't expecting that.
But hey, I guess it wasn't so bad to pass the time. :P
on 10/24/2015 12:09:55 PM with a score of 0
What the heck happens in the last part?
on 5/8/2015 5:11:16 PM with a score of 0
I thought it was supposed to be about A LONELY WOLF............but it's not
on 4/27/2015 7:54:56 PM with a score of 0
It is much safer to choose "get lost"!
on 4/9/2015 9:26:08 PM with a score of 0
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