Player Comments on The Lost Expedition (1)

It was pretty good. It had errors(everybody has at least one) but overall impression is good.
-- IIRenjiII on 5/24/2017 8:50:28 PM with a score of 0
I rated a 4. Overall, I found the story uninteresting and fairly boring, and noticed a couple of grammar mistakes. However, I do see your writing potential and I think that if you write some more stories and getting better at creating interesting narratives, you could write some great historical fiction. I look forward to playing/reading more of your work, and hopefully seeing you improve over time.
-- LogstertheNewf on 4/21/2017 6:22:33 PM with a score of 0
Amazing can't wait for the next
-- travis on 2/4/2017 8:22:09 PM with a score of 0
The use of the editor was simple, which I liked. The story and description of the plot was very nice. I did feel like the choices I had did not weight too horrible consequences, which is ok for a game like this.
-- Zulutrader on 12/13/2016 10:27:43 AM with a score of 0
Nicely written! I didn't notice any mistakes in spelling or grammar. I'm pretty happy with my results as well.
DAYS is 21.
EXPLORERS is 27.
SUPPLIES is 18.
-- BigRonn77 on 9/27/2016 10:28:28 AM with a score of 0
6/8 I liked the writing a lot. Also the choices were well thought out and were not instant death. Choices mattered but didn't stop you from enjoying the game. I look forward to part 2
-- JinDary on 4/16/2016 4:07:07 AM with a score of 0
Good a did liked it a lot. Had to think about my choices and plan ahead witch is something not to many story games make you do.
-- CharlieBoy on 3/29/2016 3:30:09 PM with a score of 0
Nice story i'll be waiting for the next part
-- angelocorvus on 3/26/2016 4:18:52 PM with a score of 0
Fine, I guess.
-- Shadow on 11/16/2015 8:56:26 AM with a score of 0
A very good time. Entertaining with great grammar and sentence structure. Fun story, with straight forward choices. I look forward to the sequel, Thanks!
-- Galootius on 10/26/2015 5:10:54 PM with a score of 0
This story is exceptionally well written, and very interesting. I hope you get around to writing a sequel.
-- invisible on 10/3/2015 10:14:28 AM with a score of 0
It is pretty good just super short
-- AthenaT on 4/18/2015 1:22:24 PM with a score of 0
31 and 9 supplies with 18 explorers, cool
-- SuperBlobby on 3/30/2015 10:15:54 AM with a score of 0
I can see why this is featured. Not one grammar mistake, Great plot, overall great story! I wish that there were more stories like this on CYS.
-- Shinobi on 2/9/2015 11:45:06 PM with a score of 0
We played this on our podcast and had a fun time! Good story, not too hard and plenty of surprises. Looking forward to Donovan's Curse!
http://www.8cn.tv/content/snakes-piranhas-and-magical-joint-go-your-own-way-e12
-- peterwjd on 12/4/2014 8:58:10 PM with a score of 0
well done
-- alleycat on 11/19/2014 8:30:54 PM with a score of 0
Excellent story, I didn't like a little sentence at the start but overall I enjoyed it, top points from me. :)

Hurry up and get the sequel done now! :)
-- TylerDanann on 11/19/2014 2:36:07 PM with a score of 0
Very interesting and well written. I must say though, there are a few writing errors, and it would be cool if you could implement a sort of system of trust, that when it goes to 0, your men overpower you, and it's game over.

I'm going to be waiting for the second one, but don't feel rushed, because you are. Not.
-- Boringfirelion on 11/18/2014 9:53:25 PM with a score of 0
Enjoyed. The grammar could do a little polishing up, specifically during dialogue, but all in all it was a great storygame. Both consequences and rewards for actions, and a nice, good story. Very well done.
-- FazzTheMan on 11/18/2014 7:17:44 PM with a score of 0
That was great
-- Farsah on 11/18/2014 5:29:27 PM with a score of 0
Well done.
-- Ford on 11/17/2014 6:09:49 PM with a score of 0
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