Player Comments on The Search For The Craxil

-continued- (stupid 900 word max cut off my comment halfway through what I was saying so I hope I haven't forgotten anything)

... why did she go to such lengths to bring the protagonist to her lair (and why did she pick the swineherd in the first place?)? (I had something else to point out in my original message about this but I've forgotten it.)

Lastly, this is just a pet peeve of mine so if you like your way better then by all means ignore this, but I couldn't help but notice that all of your links had the first letter of every word capitalised. Was there a specific reason for this?

Anyway, it was a terrific read. I'm definitely glad you made this but at the same time I'm disappointed that this is what I'm up against if I want to stand a chance at winning the contest XD Congratulations, a 7 from me!

This was a great game to play. The plot obviously meant that all paths lead to you eventually making the final confrontation with the Craxil, but there were so many different paths to take in between and that was fantastic. I'll definitely be replaying this a few times just to explore the different paths.

There's only a few things wrong with the storygame (one of which you touched on in the actual story). First off, if the Craxil can read your mind, why didn't she anticipate your strategy to kill her and consequently evade your attacks? That's the problem with having an enemy that can read the player's mind - anything the player thinks of they already know.

Second, if the Craxil could morph into the form of Brandalf the Bray (I found that name hilarious by the way XD) why didn't she simply introduce the enhanced poison into society herself? It raises the question of why did she go to a

Good:
1. Length
2. Descriptiveness
3. Humor
4. Plot depth

Bad:
1. Spelling
2. Linearity
3. Random choices

Ugly:
1. Why would the Craxil give me a poison that can kill it?
2. In the final battle, why wouldn't the Craxil read your mind that you were going to trick it and shoot it with a poisoned arrow?
3. If the Craxil can reconstitute itself after being injured, then why would poison kill it? Doesn't poison act physically? What kind of poison can kill a supernatural being???

Overall, a strong story deserving of a 7.

While I am disappointed in the two official endings because neither one is 100% good, the story itself is amazing and well written and I love the potty humor added. XD. I highly recommend making a sequel to this or at least a story similar to this with multiple endings.

For future games ending I prefer them to be your own choice whether it's good or bad. I felt like this game had a good ending and an had ending I hate feeling that.

Laughed my ass off when I accidentally wiped my ass with pison ivy.

Good story, well written. only a few misspellings. Lots of choices. I got ending #2 time go for number 1 now

fun

The writing and choices were great, the only thing is the endings weren't really satisfying but I guess that is unique in its own way

gave a 7/8 real ending 2 of 2
Nice story. many choices you either die or move on with the story, nothing but luck involved. Im not a fan of bad ends like this where you choose one direction over another and die. But its easy enough to go in the other direction after dying. I felt a part of the story and connected to the main character. Very nicely done

I saved the world.

This was so awesome! I liked the choices, story, and length.

I started this one in 2012 i am just now getting back to finishing it. I do not even recall how it started but this ending was great. I got the 2 good ending. Very good story!

The story was enjoyable. It was interesting to undertake an adventure as a lowly swineherd rather than an up and coming hero. Well done. I'll be looking forward to reading any stories you may contribute in the future.

I enjoyed it, what's more to say.

It was a brilliant story but the linearity killed it. Also the grammar wasn't so good, you used the word "your" 5 times in almost the same sentence....among other things.
And then there is the massive plot hole at Ending #2 in which you kill the craxil using a poisoned arrow. You had thought of a plan through you head and carried it out and yet....seconds before we had found out that the craxil could read our mind...

I liked the story and the new angle of you not being a warrior or combat god. The plot is fantastc, and the comedy is pretty funny. I hope you continue to write.

fun game/story!

Wish there were more endings!

Great game it had everything I love in astory. Congratulations on the story and also I liked how many different creatures you had in the story.

nice game..well written

Its really good.

Loved it to the last line. Great fantasy aspects and nice plot twists.

Yey found the real ending :D this is fun. good choice of pictures.

Pretty good, though I haven't gone back to follow all the choices. I like how most choices are descriptive and make sense with the narrative.

I think it's kinda long and there are too many ways to die.

Pretty good game

Wowsers!I really loved this, this was a nice epic! Great job! My only qualm is I wish it were even longer, but you have produced a fantastic story! Bravo!8/8

Excellent. Only 1 good ending is a drawback and you condensed 7 hours into 1 sentence just a little too often in my opinion, but the story kicks enough ass that I can overlook those things. 7/8.

kalun approves but it has disturbing images.

Its was good, can't wait for the story about the sister.

It definately kept my interest ^^ It was a nice fantasy story and had many different kinds of creatures to face and a nice selection of endings. Some of the goofier moments kind of took away from the story, but it did get a smile out of me. Keep up the good work!

Really good.

Good old adventure game.

I gave it a 6, by the way. Looking forward to your next story!

Great game! 7/8

Great story! There are some issues, though. Your usage of real-world words break the immersion (for example, "roasting them on sticks like marshmallows") and there are plot holes, but all in all it's a good read. Your writing is enjoyable and there are plenty of paths to take.

Great story, Bo approves

This story is too awesome for words.

I enjoyed this story very much. Very nice.

Cool game.