Player Comments on The Tale Of Despair

It should not be rated "for all ages." I liked your "brain leaving school to another planet" foundation, but then what happened? :(

it was really short and a bit random but it was still pretty good :) maybe lengthen it and add some more info about the two sides???

Fun story. The choices were pretty random, but the writing was so good and inventive that I didn't mind and ended up trying every option. Would definitely benefit from being longer and being fleshed out into a complete world (i.e. the two sides seemed too disconnected... *spoiler* how come we don't get to fight the blonde leader of the light side when we come at them from the dark side?)

The writing itself is decent so I'm sure if the author puts in the effort to make a longer story it'll do fine, but this one suffered from the (lack of) length and had a lot of silly randomness going on, and just in general felt pretty rushed.

'Wait, that's not my gun!' did get a chuckle out of me however.