Player Comments on To Make a Sandwich

This was pretty random, but the writing was coherent enough to make the randomness quite entertaining. I didn't expect that I would possibly be able to go on a fun filled adventure with a Capybara when I clicked on the title, so points for originality!

Some of the scenes generally made me laugh, but I couldn't help but feel that the story itself could've been fleshed out a bit more. Only a few paths truly leads towards an adventure, while the others are rather short and to the point.

Also, there is some instances when picking a certain choice will loop you back into the beginning, but that's only really a minor issue. One that was made up by the number of choices that lead to me meeting a ninja, or even fighting zombies.

This story retains the quality of it's writing throughout, as grammatical problems were never something that I found myself running into as I read through each path. So in a technical sense when it comes to the presentation of things, this story does well.

Overall, this is a fun game to kill five minutes with. The humor and general randomness might not be for everyone, but this was written well.

Not bad!

nigga this sucks :(

Absolutely nonsense and that's what made it good.

I really like games like this, but I feel like you are just on the edge of peak 'lol random' humour. Just a few more elements of randomness and you have my full enjoyment.

i has da sammich

Bad

It was fine for a random game.

Hello Mr. Author,

I think that you are talking about the story of my missing son. I would like you to give me all the information you know about him and meet with me to have a tuna sandwich. If you have a problem with me then write it on a piece of paper and then give it to me so I could tell you that if your brain was dynamite it wouldn't be enough to make your blow your hat off.

It teaches you that cabybara's are malevolous.

Awesome

grab the bread and your ingredients like ham cheese and mayo and then you put it all together then youre finished

LOL

this story was so amazing it has certainly chsnged my perspective of life. it was a maing and i love your work you have inspired me to start a carrier researching aliens zombie and dead cabyburas

funny >:)

Oh...!

If poorly written, this kind of random, crazy and completely strange story would be a pile of steaming shit. But, it was well written, with a great sense of humor, unlike some others *cough*.

Honestly hilarious, loved that good sandwich.

Very good! Yummy sandwich that was.

That was silly. Why would you be so silly here? No, really, that story was a nice story, it was quite a short story, and it was a bit random, but it was still fun. It can be difficult to pull off a story that is entertaining and random because usually random is…too random? Authors who want to make a random story should read this one and learn a bit about how to make a random story interesting. This story also had good grammar and descriptions and had a quality number of choices, especially for such a short story. And in this story, some of the different paths crossed one another, which also makes it interesting. Because of the number of different paths, readers should indeed play more than once to try out the different directions and see the effects of your choices. This was a lot of fun, thank you for sharing this one with the site!

Very interesting lol

Hm...weird, but I like weirdness.

This story was absolutely hilarious. But why in one scene is the capybara fake, but in all the others, it's real? You might want to consider lengthening it, although if it was too much longer, it wouldn't be as funny.

Fun and random. Good for a rainy day- of any kind of day, really. : )

Hilarious game. Love it. Replay so many times.

This just made me laugh a bunch. It was a funny story.

8/8 sandwiches.

I went an a amazing adventure with my new best buddy and forgot he game me rabies then I ate a sandwich and died. I never even got to cofess my love to him.
10 out of 10 would capybara again

Very random.
I love it.

It was so awesome! It made me smile after a bad day :D

I tried it again a few times and I finally did it! I'm so proud! (Loved it!)

Nice! It was really creative, ended quite soon for me though!

It's hilarious and makes me want to go through every route! XD

Holy crap, that was worth to try this one! I'm laughing at the ninja part really hard though. Glad he didn't notice me as a lamp.

This game has opened my eyes forcefully as one would with a torture instrument. It is the most peaceful, beautiful, inspirational game I could have ever come across. Bravo, good sir/madam, bravo, for you have made a light in one's life. My favorite character was capybara-kun.

The best of the best!!

It was a heartwarming story ? now to make some sandwiches~ Hora! I've made a cookie ice cream sandwich for you ???

Iz good

its fun and enjoyable have lots of funny things give u good imaginary

Eh. Who goes to Burger King nowadays?

So good had to play again. PS. Got rabies again.

10/10 would get Rabies again.

lol i was kinda hungry irl so i ate the poor guy

Very funny and quite a bit of fun.

Omg this is so random luv it XD

Instead of going back to the first page, you should have us make a sandwich. I was counting on that!

10/10 Sandwich

The only way to make it better is if it was a tuna sandwich.

Masterpiece. need more capybara tbh:^)

It was SOOOO fun !

I am enlightened.

It was rather funny. The grammar was also good. It would of been a nice addition if I actually made the sanwich

Makes me hungry

Looks good, but needs more content.

Great Job! I like how there are know endings where you die, and it is quite fun to think how much stuff could be between you and a sandwich!
(The sandwich sounds good)

Fantastic! What a clever idea to make a story game based on the fear in all of us...that someday, a ninja and a lampshade will stand between us and a sandwich. Brilliantly done. I was on the edge of my seat the whole time.

lol, I liked this. Pretty funny, and my game ended pretty early on. I hope there are more random things trying to kill you like unicorns and soccer moms. I'm playing again

Some parts are repetitive because the route tends go back to the same routes. Overall, good for a quick refresher

Until now I did'nt know making a sandwich could be so dangerous... a very entertaining game!

now me want sanwich! oh well. hey look I got one! something about corned beef and italian bread...

Lol, lol, lol!

That lampshade bit was hilarious.

Is sandwich making that easy? Just opposite.

Short,And Silly.!

I never realized how hard it is to make a sandwich

and on and on and on

reading it again :P
im liking it so much im going to link this to my friends :)

This is probably the most i have laughed from reading any of the stories on this site! This is definitely my kind of humour!! :D

Ok ....

What is this?

Petite random fun.

Sure, it may not be a heart-rending tragedy or a nerve-wracking horror, but it put a smile on my face.

what is with the rabid capybara? and UNCLIK?! seriously? whats with the random stuff? weird. just wow weird. but not good wow weird. and not sarcastic good wow weird.

Well, that was nice. It made my hour or two.

This is just epic! I like random humor with sandviches! *mmmhh sandvich :D*

This is my kind of random. I could play all day...if it went that long. Nah just kidding it's long enough with plenty of branches. Good prize.

This was fun to read because it was quick and painless. I was just in the mood for one of these. Nice story.

It is funny and rather random!

Random, but I'm not even gonna start with that.
Linear, and the reasons for dying were meh-ish at best.
Definitely not Featured material, EXPANDER!!!

It's so funny! It's also random, which is what I'm all about.

4/8 simply for the huge hilarity factor. But, it was lacking in almost every other aspect. The story made no sense, but then again, I don't think it was meant to. But we should atleast know WHY a ninja is hideing in my liveing room. It was very short, and definatly could have used some more depth.

Contrary to Expander's opinion; this is not feature material. I don't want people to get the wrong impression. Its not really an 8/8 either. Its good but not nearly that good.

This is truly feature material. 8/8. Best game ever.

awsome and funny.

This is very funny. This game is so funny it should be featured. Haha... "Unclick?" Awesome way to go!

Cereal! Dang, I wanted a sandwich <=,(

Hm, I'm gonna go eat cereal now.
Capybara, very original.

Nice 'story', 6/8

Haha! COOL!

Ha! I love these kind of game's
Funny and Random.
"Oh noes! You are attacked by rabid squirrles!"
6/8

well i realy liked this game caled To make a sandwich.It was random,funny,fun and time killing.The things i diden't like about this game was there wasen't that much choices and it was that long but out of 10 i give it a 8!!!!!!

awsome. words cannot describe my love for this game.

Better than many random storygames, because it had a plotline (sort of) to it, and it wasn't just the author going, "lol my story is so random". I liked it, and rated it high for replayability. I could play this again and again for a while.

Ah, another abstract game. I really like these, where a wierd world still has logic to it. 6/8.

Truly an excellent story. Not long or well thought out but stupendously funny and ultimately a great read. 6/8. "Click", "Unclick".

it could have been longer and it wuz REALLY RANDOM!!! in a goodish way!lol

this is going to sound weird, but that was some well thought out randomness lol. i actually enjoyed the experience. nice choices for the story all around. not the best story on the site, but i did enjoy it. write more.

I like the sense of humor in this story, but it's very short and doesn't have a plot. Probably what most of you would describe as "random." I'd like to see more from you.