Player Comments on U R: A Magician

This is a nice attempt at a good story at magician school. I like idea and the setting. I like that I’ve got a clear goal to find my wand, that was fun. I’m not sure I get the hallway and the doors, though. It appeared to be completely random. It might be nicer to search for my wand if there were hints about where I might go or what I might find before I get demerits for looking for my wand!

Beyond that, there’s not a lot to this story. The story has a tremendous amount of potential. Each one of those pages that has a few words or a few sentences could be transformed into a wall of text with vivid descriptions, thoughts, and details. You could expand and describe the things that exist in each classroom. The transformations could be described in detail as you twist and convert into each additional animal.

I don’t really understand the demerits, either. Why are they there? They didn’t seem to have an effect on the story. Maybe they could be used to see if you have certain options later in the game – for example, if you have less than 3 demerits, you might see different options near the end or at least get different endings. And speaking of endings, this one really sort of ended all of a sudden. Sure, you completed a day in school, but then what? Nothing really happened, and you didn’t appear to accomplish anything. This would be even better if near the end it led to another year, another day, another person, or even graduation. This is a great start and could be something really good with some additions.

At first, it was somewhat interesting. The beginning was fine: you presented the character with a problem (the missing wand), and they had to solve it. But after that, it soon became apparent that there was no meaning to the story. I felt that you were only piling random events on top of each other, and it would have been better if you created an actual plot. Your writing could also use some work. More detailed scenes would be better. As for your grammar, it was okay. There were some errors here and there, and there were some parts where you failed to correctly use punctuation. As for the demerits, I couldn't see how they affected the story or whether they were truly necessary.

Good but make it longer. A lot longer.

I really liked this. It was actually really fun!!

It was cool

I spent half the game looking through multiple doors for this wand of mine, whilst people kept turning me into animals. I swear, I must have turned into 5 different farmyard animals whilst teachers yelled at me and took away my non-existent Gryffindor points for very little reason at all. It was like everyone was just out to get me.

I liked the "magic school" feel, but it really needs room for improvement and something beyond "find your wand and avoid demerits".

Absolutely pointless....I like it.

Very boring use of advance editor. This story was at first interesting. But, then you just fucked it up.

Is there a way to not earn demerits?

Nice :D

It was interesting, but a little unusual.

not bad

I enjoyed it a little, but needs to be longer to grab me some attention.

I gave it a five for the interesting story. I would like to know if the demerits had any effect on the story.

Really short.

This was amusing and funny, but what is the purpose of the demerits besides showing you how many you have?

Sort of fun except I thought that there should be some combat spell training besides just zapping some of the other students and teachers.

Died from poisoned cheese.

I liked it... But it needed to be longer! 2/8

Very Fun

A died from cheese poisoning... -_-

This was really great and there was a lot of things going on! Well done

can you get less then 4 demerits

Pretty good,i liked it.Well done!

This game is weird because of the dust bunnies.

This was interesting. Not the best, but FAR from the worst. Pretty good! =D

Bo acknologes the existance of this story

Is there any point! at ALL!!

Kewl

its ok.

I don't understand the point of demerits? Maybe I made a mistake by going to sleep instead of staying up all night..either way, the story was much too linear.

that was fun

Nice little story. Keep it up

Awesome,simply amazing.

that was funny in parts/ but it was short

re: emma101rox
You say it's too short, and yet if you look at the play length, it's a five. If you encounter a death link early in the story, that doesn't mean that overall it is short.

Pretty fun. Not much depth, but it was worth...something.

ok i understand this time but it was still WAY short!!!

i dont even know what that was about..............to everyone....................DONT TRY................

i was a bad magician :D

How sad. The entire story for me was looking for my wand. I read this because I read your Asstronaut story and people said it wasn't as good as this one. I don't know if they are right or not, but this was terrible.

You should write an autobiographical story/game on here and call it U R an idiot.

not completely bad.

Absolutely incredible!

Whats with these weird demerits. And why does a wizard go to a school WITHOUT A WAND??? kinda odd hey :%

Cool, I like it.

Good sense of humor, I guess.

This is kinda cool . . .

I like the idea of a school of magic. Well done! A game that didn't involve violence.. now that's rare.

This is a really gos game!

I like this one much better than U R an astronaut. It was much more fun and the links actually worked this time, including the items, well done. It was fun. I got kicked out for too many deremits, whoops. I didn't want to cheat and go back though (won't do that on advance games, only basic games that have guess links.)

Most of these endings, if not all, are pretty dumb.

Cheese can't be poisoned. It's fugus. God!

Clever and fun, I liked the creativity of the different spells. I liked being a pig. I wish I had been a boar so I could have gored the older students. Great work!

This was Rodney's idea. He did most of the story. Thank You!

HAHAHA, I like the Newt Legs (Don't let animal lovers see this..........) HAHAHA! Great game! I got turn into an ant :D!

The whole game was wierd and didin't make any sense.It was also too easy

Wow, this game is addictive. Got 10 demerits! lol

Could you also make it so that whereever you have Demerit go up you have score go up also? That would show people the demerits they got. I got 4, the minimum.

If you haven't played this hear this: This is a puzzle game. You need to have good wits to get everything correctly.

Oh yes, Rodney and Conneth ~ Great Puzzles but there is a bug where I can enter Charms class twice.

just not enough depth to it. i like the puzzle concepts but you need to bring more story to the next one.