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Ok, I suppose.

The utter randomness of the storygame really threw me through a loop, because some parts I could barely understand. It was that random. Some of the illogical parts might not have been on purpose, such as hearing your own skull break. I'm not sure you'd be able to hear your own skull break from compression, honestly.

It wasn't the longest storygame i've ever seen, but there's quite a few links and more then a few sentences on each page. I'm very glad it wasn't just another one of those crappy two click win or lose games.

Sadly, I didn't spot much detail or character development, or even much decent emotion for that matter. I mean, even if there was any emotion, the large amounts of random humor sorta took away from it in my opinion.

That aside, I did enjoy some parts of the storygame, because I love a bit of randomness once in a while, but not a lot.

It was incredibly linear, and I felt like I was reading a paragraph from one book, then reading another from a completely unrelated book and trying to figure out how I got from one to the other.

Overall, many downsides, but a fun read. 3/8.

It was certainly quite random, but I saw no apparent issues with the grammar and this storygame was rather serviceable in providing me with much entertainment. This certainly had a certain charm to it with all of the randomness. While this may not be for everyone, this isn't a bad story by any means and it is something that I found to be rather enjoyable.

Bravo :)

This story was veryyy random, which is probably the main fault of it. Some stories are very random as well, but random in a good way. This was the type of random that doesn't necasarrily makes sense.

The story was liner and pretty short, and took at least a minute or so to beat. I didn't like the choices, which weren't plentyful. I feel as though, if you're trying to drive out a funny/random story, at least make it long, but this was short and in a couple of minutes you would have gone through the whole thing.

The plot was a whole 'nuther thing. Very strange and very confusing, too random for my liking, and too random to sort of understand it. For example, I walk out of the room, and then this happens:

"...and at that moment two jet-pack equipped bank robbers fly out of a pie, and take all of your money."

...what?

Also, at the "good" ending where it told you it would make sense of the plot, it didn't give me any knowledge besides the fact that the old man died. This didn't contribute to the understanding of the plot, as far as I am concerned.

The last thing I wanted to talk about was the writing. Riddled with grammatical, puncuational, etc mistakes which are very bland in the open. this really should be proofread.

It didn't make much sense, it was increasingly random, very liner with not so many choices to do, easily get all endings/choices in a couple of minutes, writing was bad...

I give this a 4/8.

The crude humour threw me for a loop.
Ummm, not sure what to say about this, except, spell-check yourself, try to add a linear-type of story
- even though it's a CYOA -
and don't just add random stuff to be random.
Good though?

I thought it was hilarious I went through a bunch of times just to see what other things happened. It was so random and weird that it was actually fun. I would give it a 8/10 I personally really enjoyed your humor and found this story hilarious

sooooooooo boring!

Each page was very short, there kept being comments about the author being bad, and the choice between 2 doors with 3 options had 2 of them send you back.

3 for the humour.

noice

I would not even publish this because it makes no sense. It doesn't have a plot to it. Now if you wanted to work on the next one a little more, I would gladly help.

This game was random and doesn't make much sense.

this game is trash no effort put into this one dont waste your time if u want a real story read love sick (its a book on this site in horror)

that was awesome

its ok

Though shirt and pointless, I admit, it made me chuckle more than once and that atleast deserves an average score, so there. 4/8

Eh, as much as I love my detail (and mind, I love it a lot) I got to say that I actually enjoyed this. Huh, didn't think I would as I'm usually opposed to randomness in stories but oh well!

A fun, little distraction. Kept me entertained for some time and had very good grammar and spelling (thank ye Gods). 6/8

Uuuuuhhh what?

It was alright but weird

It's really really weird, and actually, the random ending is better than the good ending. :|

I found this pretty funny. 4/8

Didn't mention the monster was made of carrots until after you eat it, then you get told your allergic to carrots, heh heh heh

Was the author on drugs when they wrote this?

Dog ate me?

This story was a little too linear for my liking. Also, way too short. The plot was awkward and confusing.

It was okay, it passed a few minutes.

Random but funny

...5/8

I like random insanity!

awesome! I love it so much

boring

Random Ending shouldn't be better than good ending

terrible No action. Crap.

Not bad, the humor wasn't hilarious, but it wasn't completely retarded like most of the other random games. Kinda fun.

ummm odd....

It was more enjoyable than plenty of stories that are not bizarre/random/intentionally stupid... so, good job.

funny and lots of fun

I want to become just like him when I'm old.

hoo in god damn hell is this

Good Story...!

Awesome! I had to follow every link just to see what happened!

pretty good when you lose

Almost good to read then Potatokiller...

Can I get that Slim Jim now?

could be better.....

but if you snap into a slim jim u win or supposeto

I just wasted 6 minutes of my life.

I love it just random randomness at it's randomest. Seems surprisingly similar to the time I was cutting open pineapples looking for spongebob

lol very random and intresting. I could think of a number of ways to expand this story but it's up to you. :)

cool.

LOLLLLLLL I LOVED THIS!!!! while i can see how some people would udderly hate this, I absolutly posistivly exactalutely loved it^_^ I live for random ,and you sir/madame are WIN!!! Carry on, and may 10,000 Venus tablecloths eat your soul.^_^

Well I have never been this confused in my life!

Random defintly in for the random tag.

Your description are merely echoing your dialogue in the story. Nevermind the randomness, but having your character say, "It's a monster," then your text says it's a monster makes it really redundant. This can tend to bore people and probably would have if the game were any longer. I suggest saying it's a monster, having your character say something to show his surprise, then describe what makes the monster so terrifying. It's organization and description.

um. random. all i'm gonna say. 3/8

Very random but good storygame

I laughed a lot, good CYOA =D.

LOL @ Silverman saying that your spelling is atrocious, while mis-spelling atrocious LOL.

There were some spelling errors and, um, it stunk. Sorry.

It was Ok definetly not the best i've read. If it were a little longer that would be good

For all its randomness, I did find it really fun to do. Great job. Not everyone may agree with me, but I suppose this thing just hits my taste :)

You owe me five minutes of my life back, mister.

hahaha i liked how random it was!

Alright! Pretty decent

It was decent. It wasn't great, nor good. It was decent. Try a little harder next time.

Yes, the author died and I lived happily ever after

Wow, did I write this? Haha, wow. I don't know... I enjoyed it, but then again, I guess I've got a stupid sense of humor. XP

The story was too short, and it was extremly random. The spelling was atrocius also.

take that old man

5/8 funny and random. I turned into a tree.

Damn old man.

lol! I gave it a five, because it was funny, "Snap in to a slim jim! Eat me!" heh heh. Probably one of the best random games on here. :THUMBS UP:

your name...zero...i wish there was a rating that low. you have creativity which is good....now use it!

Ohhh, I was just playing this to check for errors and stuff. I didn't leave any rating.

I'm sorry, I can't say I'm much of a big fan of "random" storygames in the first place, but I could see your writing talent right there. It's not you're a bad writer, I just don't like it when its this random. I liked how you integrated everything in with the other parts.

I'm sorry, but this sucks. It might have worked if there was a real explaination, an actual story, longer threads, or descriptive writing, but this failed them all.

4/8 pretty good but u could do better i bet

Was funny. Small typo:

"With all the answers left unanswered."

I hope you mean: "With all the questions left unanswered)

Zero - how about a story next time? That would be nice - one of those nifty things called story-lines! And plot!
You tried a little too hard to sound like mazeman, and the truth is I never much cared for his writing either!

ha ha ha, pretty funny. Random, but not enough to be stupid. 5/8