DRIVE
A
sci-fi
storygame by
WizzyCat
Player Rating
5.64/8
"Too few ratings to be ranked"
Based on
12 ratings
since 04/01/2024
Played 139 times (finished 12)
Story Difficulty
5/8
"Run through the jungle"
Play Length
4/8
"A well spent lunch break"
Maturity Level
7/8
"Anything goes"
Some material may be inappropriate for persons under age 18. If this were a movie, it would probably be R.
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Entry to Endmaster's Prompt Contest 3
Player Comments
you suck
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Ford
on 4/2/2024 12:40:00 AM with a score of 0
I won’t say a lot because it seems Wizzy is aware of a lot of the faults in his own story, mainly it being unfinished and riddled with SPAG errors, but I will say that I did like the uniqueness of the storygame and how knowledgeable he seems to be with guns. Though I did think the dialogue seemed a little juvenile at times and reminded me of certain young adult novels.
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Suranna
on 5/10/2024 6:20:50 PM with a score of 0
The cyberpunk atmosphere to this story is well-realized. I like the description of the action and the back-and-forth banter between characters.
The spacing format is a little jarring for me as I need to do a lot of scrolling to get through pages, but that's just a personal preference.
The story does seem a bit rushed (makes sense for the contest deadline), which leaves a lot of questions regarding worldbuilding, the schizophrenic voice and the stakes of the conflict. I love the idea of another version of this story where the players gets to make more decisions during the race that affect her performance and position.
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MiltonManThing
on 4/8/2024 4:33:10 PM with a score of 0
Action packed, fast paced, and vivid characterization. Wizzy has done well to capture attention here.
From what I could see, though, the story feels about 30-40% complete. I would like to read more about the brother, the worldbuilding, and the DRIVE competition itself. Unfortunate, but understandable as it was rushed out for the competition.
Definitely a good basis that needs much development and flesh. Good work.
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PerforatedPenguin
on 4/3/2024 8:22:40 PM with a score of 0
3 typos, 1 minor continuity error. 1/8
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WizzyCat
on 4/2/2024 12:35:30 AM with a score of 0
A great story, although I would have liked a little more character development, it was an enjoyable read! I'll say it again: great story!
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benholman44
on 4/2/2024 12:09:45 AM with a score of 0
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