Clover Seven: Ace Attorney - Episode 2: The Party Killer Turnabout

I got ending rank B :) Well, this game was certainly an improvement from the last, as this case provided a bit more difficulty and thinking that was required for me to even get the ending that I received.

One other thing that kept me playing was the humor. It was in abundance and the small interactions between certain characters made me legitimately laugh a few times. It did this while maintaining the overall feeling of a Ace Attorney game, for the most part, that is.

Some issues with grammar and typos seemed to have returned from the first in this series. Some misspellings were rather jarring at times and sometimes disrupted the overall flow of the pace of this game. Ah, but when they're not focused on so intently, the game really takes off and becomes a fun, humorous ride.

These storygames really are a good addition to the Fan Fiction category on this site, but I feel that it would've been even better if it had just a bit more polish.

Welp, that was fun! I've got some problems with your game, but overall I enjoyed it. I love the Ace Attorney/Investigations games, so I knew I'd love your Clover Seven series. So far, so good. I noticed significant improvement from the first case to the second. In hopes of helping you get better, I'm gonna tell you (in my opinion) what went right and what went wrong. It's up to you to take my constructive criticism or not, yo.

The GOOD:
-The Humor. Some of it's a bit tongue-in-cheek, but that's EXACTLY what one would expect from an AA game. I loved some of the banter between characters and the humor expressed in the courtroom. You took it a bit further with Ed and the Judge; both seem slightly crazy and in their own world. Colorful characters like them are what make the game great.
-The Main Characters: I don't know too much about him just yet, but I'm enjoying playing from Clover's perspective. I assume we'll learn more about him and our rival prosecutor in games to come, and I actually can't wait. Ed clearly has some backstory bubbling under the surface as well. Oh, and the Judge is admittedly insane. I LOVE IT!
-The Trial: Cross Examination (Press/Objection) actually works pretty well in its current format. Although the watch works the same as the magatama, I still enjoyed its inclusion in the game and hope it becomes a larger element subsequently. The logic leaps in presenting evidence aren't that large (there were a couple toughies, but I understood the relevance after getting it right).

The NOT SO GOOD:
-The Grammar: Your story is in dire need of some cleanup. I get the gist of what is being said, but the misspellings and improper sentence structure can be jarring at times. Get someone to proofread your scripts for you, or run it through WORD before applying it to the page.
-The Facts: Be careful with how certain elements of the story are presented. In a game that relies heavily on logical puzzles, it is IMPERATIVE that everything lines up for the player to assess themselves. For example: At one point you're talking to the defendant in the detention center. When asked a question, they clearly state that the answer doesn't matter because they ""don't have a specific item anymore"". You sense they're lying but leave it be, that's fine. However, FOUR LINES later, the defendant gives you the item they just claimed to not have. It's not even questioned. It was confusing as to whether that was an important fact or not. A good proofreading should squash these inconsistencies. Again, have someone else check your work for facts and flow. Polish is what can bring a game from great to fantastic!
-The "Press": Clover seems to be quite the redundant thought process. Most of his "Press" statements/questions simply ask what the witness was about to state anyway. Fluff the dialogue up a bit. This is where you can potentially learn things about the case or other people that you didn't know before. It doesn't have to be relevant to the case, either; it can be something fun for the reader or just a little character development via someone's opinions.


Anyway, I'm done rambling. I hope you don't take offense to my suggestions. Whether you do or don't, I'll be playing the next Clover Seven game. I needs my Ace Attorney fix! You're doing a good job so far, and I commend you for your creativity and seeing these games through completion. Bravo, good Creator!

Oh, and I got the B ending. I'm gonna do another run for the A!

I got nostalgic about it, then I realized that I'm very very bad at these detective games

That was much longer and more entrenching than the first one! I still saw quite a few spelling errors but great job anyway!

5/10 my only regret was letting brad get away. When my mission is over I might come back to this one!

HOW DO YOU GET RANK A?!?!

How do I get AAAAA

It really good but sometimes confusing.

This story is definitely worth your try

I got the A ranking :D

This one is much better than the first one. Still plagued with typos but at least it was a bit longer and had much more to offer. Highly suggested.

Brilliantly done.