Player Comments on A Day in Your Room
;p i thought this was scary bruh
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— really on 11/3/2020 4:00:46 PM with a score of 0
Random, funny, somewhat coherent... Not bad
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CancerTheCrab
on 10/13/2020 11:55:07 PM with a score of 0
yay i like icecream
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— hi on 5/20/2020 12:30:52 PM with a score of 0
Funny
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ArtsyGirl38
on 2/11/2020 2:56:02 PM with a score of 0
i love the part where you get like a gazillion dollars. its also funny when you spash mom with water XD
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Shadow_Drip
on 5/18/2019 3:16:33 PM with a score of 0
I understand that you made this in two hours, but couldn't you spend some more time on this game?
The idea is good, but some more detail and realism might be in order. For example, why does the mom decide to serve ice cream (especially after her kid dumped a bucket of water on her)?
Also (and this is a major point for me) spellcheck. Practically all of your words were not capitalized. If you cannot even input the time to ensure everything is capitalized, punctuated, and spelled correctly, it makes it seem like you don't care about your writing.
In short, great idea, but you could (and should) do so much more with it.
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Cupcakitty__13
on 3/13/2019 4:14:34 PM with a score of 0
Horrible ??
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— JJ on 11/30/2018 11:45:09 AM with a score of 0
Too sweet. Rule the world!
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PaulaAnneMason
on 11/11/2018 2:54:27 PM with a score of 0
The storyline doesn't even make sense, spelling errors galore, the only good thing was the endings "dead wet corpses can leave comments too!" 2/8.
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abchiaramonte
on 7/24/2018 8:38:46 AM with a score of 0
It was funny, but it had a lot of spelling errors.
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MagicalMonkey
on 6/10/2018 5:14:12 PM with a score of 0
this is hilarious
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zephurricane
on 1/22/2018 1:50:47 AM with a score of 0
Really funny! I only have one piece of advice for you - lemonaid is actually spelled lemonade. :)
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parislover
on 1/8/2018 1:02:48 PM with a score of 0
That was the funniest thing I ever did, I really wanted to do a fort and I lost XD.
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pebble
on 12/5/2017 9:49:52 AM with a score of 0
Yay ice-cream for dinner! Building the fort is totally worth it! ;D
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TestingJest
on 11/18/2017 2:44:19 AM with a score of 0
First, I would like to tell you all the goods in your story:
Your imagination and your story are perfect.
Secondly, I will say what bad in your story:
You do some story, I can only tell that I understand that you need to escape your room and not to die stupidly.
All the story is not much understandable for anyone who reads, you need to work in your story at least a week.
You need to check if you have some words like "thiss" that you need to delete or replace with other word.
And finally, I am recommend you to go to the help and forum newbies to get some help and get started.
My advice to you: think, do and write, proofread and delete what not you need in your story.
Final rating: 2/8
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TheGamerKing777
on 11/12/2017 3:02:51 PM with a score of 0
This games is unusual in two ways;
1. weird storyline
2. unusual options
but otherwise its good and short and :) :) :) :) :)
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— G0thG!rL on 7/13/2017 2:19:09 PM with a score of 0
This is hilarious. I kinda want to go build a pulley too!
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UnStriped_Tiger
on 6/29/2017 5:23:18 PM with a score of 0
I built a fort. I thinked about icecream.
BEST STORY EVER
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MrDuckFace
on 2/6/2017 10:57:05 PM with a score of 0
Simple. Very short.
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Quorrah
on 1/23/2017 12:42:33 AM with a score of 0
This could be a kinda fun game if it was longer and was less random; the bad spellings and weird randomness of it is kinda a turn-off.I loved that you put a Tom Sawyer reference tho so you get an extra point for that ^-^
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Yuisawachelsa
on 12/16/2016 4:06:47 AM with a score of 0
Hard to read. Bad grammar, misspellings.
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Mage
on 11/30/2016 7:25:57 AM with a score of 0
Okay I did the route where you build a fort and you're happy about it and I'm not going to lie it was actually pretty funny. XD
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DavyDrake
on 11/24/2016 8:30:08 PM with a score of 0
Hi :-). It was good, but I feel you could have made it slightly better, by adding another option. Running back upstairs and bolting the door. You could add, "Your mum hears the thudding of footsteps running up the stairs, but just assumes it's coming from the telivision downstairs. So she brushes the noise off, and assume you're still in your room. You decide that when you're allowed out of your room again, you'll buy some things to make it cozier. Like a TV, make up set, games, etc. With that thought, you decide to flop on your bed and have a nap.". So with this option, your character has a chance of escaping death and the possible wrath of mum, and has a happy ending by thinking happy thoughts. ... Hope that helps. Again, good job. For your first time, I feel you didn't do too badly! :-).
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— Rahila on 10/29/2016 11:38:29 AM with a score of 0
10/10, would subscribe for more
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— Alex on 10/25/2016 12:41:51 PM with a score of 0
It's greAT, but if it was'nt so short, that would be amazing!
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angela1000
on 10/17/2016 7:12:04 PM with a score of 0
The idea was really interesting, but it would be more fun if the story was longer and there was less chance of death. How do game boxes kill?
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— Morganis on 8/14/2016 6:36:04 PM with a score of 0
Haha the deaths were pretty funny! I really liked it, 5/8!
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Ginnyweasleybooklove
on 8/8/2016 5:49:09 PM with a score of 0
This was really funny! ALL the deaths were funny! "OK sissy don't build a fort" HAHA
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Girly_Writer246
on 7/18/2016 9:28:30 PM with a score of 0
Great story very funny it is just short
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— Anonimouse(think i spelled tha on 6/6/2016 3:24:24 PM with a score of 0
haha, lost of money, good rating. Mail the money to my house, and sure, i will XD
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Honeydusk842
on 5/4/2016 9:33:07 PM with a score of 0
Finished it in 5 seconds,wow
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Shamazaie
on 2/27/2016 6:55:52 PM with a score of 0
This was stupid.
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— Nicole on 2/17/2016 7:22:40 PM with a score of 0
Bad game don't play this at all
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— James on 2/5/2016 9:42:42 AM with a score of 0
For a first piece, it wasn't awful. It wasn't exactly fun to play, though. For future storygames, here are some tips
1.) Spend lots of time on each game
2.) Never settle for "presentable", only publish when you think it is your best.
3.) Don't be afraid to go crazy. As long as there is a plot and good grammer, it is okay.
I'm not exactly one to talk, as I haven't even published any of my games, so I'm no expert.
While the plot is boring, I can tell you can do better. You have great voice!!! I do like the idea, and I hope you make more!
I hope this was helpful, but remember: the opinion that matters the most is your own!
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Ryndragonmaster
on 2/4/2016 9:59:53 AM with a score of 0
Not entertaining at all. There were mechanical errors, the storygame was extremely short, and the ending? Writing a story where the narrator seems to resent the reader can be funny if written in the right way, but this seemed to be more of 'life sucks, you're done'. It was very abrupt and had no point.
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AllThatIsGold
on 1/7/2016 5:47:41 PM with a score of 0
im just ..... no
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heyheyhey
on 1/2/2016 5:26:01 PM with a score of 0
Too short and only one way to (kinda) win it was horrible
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— Jake on 12/21/2015 12:05:17 AM with a score of 0
Too short so boring.
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SnowLeopard
on 9/26/2015 5:34:36 PM with a score of 0
It's a bit more difficult than 1/8
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TheMonitor
on 9/23/2015 7:06:59 PM with a score of 0
Where did the robots and stuff come from?
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jayfeather808
on 7/29/2015 12:32:20 AM with a score of 0
I think this was actually a pretty good and humorous story, but you needs too works on you're grammar.
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GMB13carat
on 7/6/2015 1:53:40 PM with a score of 0
It was alright
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justinwoof
on 6/26/2015 3:18:03 AM with a score of 0
It got that innocent feeling, pure like a white color but there are some others in the mix as well. The ending quotes are quite interesting and it got me to choose another route to see all of them. Short and simple but fun, I like it.
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FaithRomeyer
on 4/27/2015 1:30:32 PM with a score of 0
Good
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— anonymous on 3/3/2015 12:12:58 AM with a score of 0
could be better
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— maiya on 11/26/2014 5:44:10 PM with a score of 0
I got ice cream!! But, seriously, it is pretty boring. But, I know what it's like to have those "comments" overall it was okay. I'd rate it 3/10.
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Mkittycat101
on 11/9/2014 1:11:50 PM with a score of 0
lol
I jumped into the fish tank and drowned. I'm adopted?!
Well, DEAD WET CORPSES CAN STILL LEAVE COMMENTS!!!
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— .,, on 10/25/2014 7:03:20 PM with a score of 0
Heh heh. Motor oil.
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thequeen13
on 10/2/2014 3:27:38 PM with a score of 0
It's all so clear now...
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— Bill on 8/18/2014 9:59:55 AM with a score of 0
weird but original .. i got the fireplace , aquarium and fort ending ..
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ChibiChu
on 8/10/2014 5:26:27 AM with a score of 0
This story wasn't extremely bad, but it wasn't the greatest either. I think if you fixed up your grammar, added more links and maybe tucked a story or two in there, it could become a great story. Good try though.
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TheSophia
on 7/29/2014 4:04:19 AM with a score of 0
I AM THE MAJESTIC ROBOT MASTER AND I AM GOING TO STAY FAR, FAR AWAY.
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— Logan Pizza on 7/27/2014 12:38:42 PM with a score of 0
This is probably the worst story I've seen on this site. For good reason. I played it for, like, 20 minutes and then eventually quit it.
I give it 2/8, only because it did, in fact, cure my boredom for 20 minutes. This story isn't boring, folks, just bad. That's not necassarily the same thing.
I gave it another point, because, the whole idea of being grounded and sentenced to your room does sound pretty fun, if you give it a creative twist and try to see what you could possibly do in your room, which is what happened here. However this was short, the grammar looks like it was written by some 12 year old, and at times this story was kind of strange, weird, far-fetched, and made you go WTF because there was just no logic!
If the author made a more revised edition, with a far more creative twist, more details, spacing, logic, and fixed grammar, I'm sure it would get more points and we could all forgive you for this.
So let's all wait for the day "A Day in Your Room REVISED" comes out.
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— Fazz on 7/22/2014 11:58:30 PM with a score of 0
Annoying and boring. One of the worse.
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— eragonsgirl on 7/6/2014 5:11:16 PM with a score of 0
Why can't you spell?
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Meadow
on 5/17/2014 4:41:09 PM with a score of 0
What the.
Hell.
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EarthCollision
on 3/8/2014 3:16:13 PM with a score of 0
The grammar was atrocious, I don't understand how people say this is rated a 4/8 rating.
I gave it a 2.
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GentleWinterBreeze
on 2/20/2014 2:03:42 PM with a score of 0
Yes I'm Rich btch!
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RabbitSeason
on 1/14/2014 4:57:45 AM with a score of 0
I agree with the comments about logic and spacing. Fun for kids, I guess.
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boringtuna
on 11/24/2013 3:51:04 AM with a score of 0
What did you do to spacing.... And grammar.... And logic....? Why...? WHY?
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— NotStupid on 11/4/2013 11:33:47 PM with a score of 0
sorry about that last comment.....
i showed the game to somebody...
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puddlebunni
on 9/11/2013 6:10:42 PM with a score of 0
Now I'm grounded for eternity....
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The_Great_Natalow
on 9/9/2013 7:16:06 PM with a score of 0
A bit short, but at least I got ice cream and a free point. YEAH!
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The_Great_Natalow
on 9/9/2013 7:13:15 PM with a score of 0
Fun idea, but it has several grammatical/spelling errors.
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twonkykitty
on 9/9/2013 1:43:39 PM with a score of 0
I RULE THE WORLD ^•^
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CLSGatorwrestler
on 7/31/2013 8:16:28 PM with a score of 0
Woooooooooooooo I'm headless.
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— Angelic05 on 7/23/2013 8:23:33 PM with a score of 0
its short
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HaruhiSuzumiya
on 6/25/2013 2:25:34 AM with a score of 0
Cewl
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haledakota
on 5/27/2013 4:57:40 PM with a score of 0
I don't know why people rate you so low.
This is definitely the most immature I have played on this site.
I loved it.
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puddlebunni
on 5/18/2013 9:45:29 PM with a score of 0
That was...interesting. A tad short, but fun enough.
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ChronoStrike
on 5/13/2013 12:45:46 PM with a score of 0
First off, that was more fun than I expected although the story is a bit random, but the humor and references made that it much better. I could have liked it a bit better if there was more to it then 'escape your room'.
I too planned zombie escape routes from my room too.
(what? Don't judge me.)
5/8
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SilverFlame1995
on 3/3/2013 12:14:16 PM with a score of 0
awesome game. Robot army. Awesome. I would totally build one. Aeadd more stuff that was #oooo short. Ha-ha.
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— leo on 2/20/2013 3:17:28 PM with a score of 0
Okay, I'll admit. That was cool how some kid got so much money, but I thought it was a day in my room. And what's up with the zombies and the robot armies? Still, not bad. Just way off topic.
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— sb on 2/17/2013 3:19:07 AM with a score of 0
Cute. I like the different sayings for game over and to leave a comment. Still, it was kinda short and the writing itself could use some fine tuning.
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Mynoris
on 2/14/2013 3:59:47 PM with a score of 0
pretty good game
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EragonMax490
on 2/14/2013 11:21:26 AM with a score of 0
It was awesome. Put your talents to good use.
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Darkbound
on 2/2/2013 4:53:31 PM with a score of 0
Funny
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chasemeee
on 2/2/2013 3:18:38 PM with a score of 0
I was very entertained with exploring the options but it was short and I died a couple of times. Whats up with all these death endings? I've played several G and PG games with no matter were I go I die. But it was funny.
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Tinkerbell
on 1/3/2013 6:32:15 PM with a score of 0
Forts are F-ing awesome! ^_^
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Briar_Rose
on 11/16/2012 2:58:50 PM with a score of 0
Just stay far,far away...
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— John on 10/29/2012 7:09:09 AM with a score of 0
I tested all the possible outcomes, and all of them are hilarious!
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— Kiandra on 10/11/2012 7:38:27 PM with a score of 0
Can I help it if I like forts? And ICE CREAM!!
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— Tamara on 10/11/2012 7:33:29 PM with a score of 0
SUCKED
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— LLL on 10/6/2012 8:25:05 PM with a score of 0
drinking motor oil... so... safe. >.>
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Kiel_Farren
on 8/26/2012 3:04:57 PM with a score of 0
It could've been waaay better! Interesting concept though.
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Tobias-Muttley
on 8/6/2012 3:38:51 PM with a score of 0
Awesome Does Not Approve!
Uh... where to start... I don't think I can win. All the options killed me except for that 1/4 chance of survival. Grammer was hard to understand, and it was all in all simply boring.
(Not Leaving Rating. Not 1)
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awesomeness1242
on 7/2/2012 5:14:37 PM with a score of 0
Quite good man. Sort of boring though but it's okay.
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— Shadow on 6/16/2012 10:54:56 AM with a score of 0
Less effort than peeling banana!
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RobustSporadic
on 6/2/2012 6:45:20 AM with a score of 0
Since I have so much money
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bells23
on 5/4/2012 1:50:33 AM with a score of 0
STOOOPID so short, so idiotic and farty don't even play it
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— D:<<<<< on 4/28/2012 8:15:51 PM with a score of 0
sucky
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— fart-o-matic on 4/28/2012 8:14:08 PM with a score of 0
Longer and less random
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— bradhal on 4/16/2012 10:50:36 AM with a score of 0
please make it more challending
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— bad gal on 4/14/2012 11:22:53 AM with a score of 0
I know you were going for the whole "Random/crazy game" but I don't think you quite accomplished it. It just seemed weird to me and not as funny as I think you wanted it to be. Also, the spelling wasn't the best which made the story confusing to me.
3/8
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JMgskills
on 4/10/2012 8:29:21 AM with a score of 0
random
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betaband
on 4/8/2012 1:27:15 PM with a score of 0
Fuck you candyland >:O hold your weight
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ZenUndead
on 3/16/2012 8:17:12 AM with a score of 0
Could have more things to do though
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Danzis
on 1/14/2012 6:37:49 PM with a score of 0
That was funny.
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kandbabies
on 11/4/2011 11:25:09 PM with a score of 0
I can't send you happiness.
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Killer999
on 10/10/2011 9:22:06 AM with a score of 0
So many random choices, but still so addicting trying to find all the endings! 6/8
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RiterOfWrandom
on 7/10/2011 9:54:12 PM with a score of 0
Bo approves
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ThisisBo
on 5/11/2011 9:47:26 PM with a score of 0
YAY! I won a Nobel Prize! Lucky me.
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Bluesaver153
on 4/17/2011 9:52:03 PM with a score of 0
YAY! I GOT ICE CREAM FOR DINNER! YUM!!
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fergie14233
on 11/7/2010 5:08:13 PM with a score of 0
Hahaha... I burned to death.
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the_forgotten_apple
on 4/25/2009 8:43:13 PM with a score of 0
So you want me to jump out the window to escape, but you don't want me to build a fort. Then when I build the fort you say that escaping is for sissies?
It all makes perfect sense.
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checker444
on 4/10/2009 10:01:16 AM with a score of 0
funny
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donnydude
on 3/15/2009 11:32:27 AM with a score of 0
yeah you can make it longer.
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mastodont
on 12/6/2008 12:29:27 PM with a score of 0
so damn short. make it longer and with more detail
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deadly_sinner66
on 8/17/2008 4:35:38 AM with a score of 0
its VERY VERY short. but from it i can see you might have some potential in making random games
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realprety
on 7/28/2008 8:10:49 PM with a score of 0
A bit more effort would be nice. I know it was your first, so I didn't give it a really low score. Try harder and you'll do well.
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madglee
on 6/11/2008 2:21:48 PM with a score of 0
:( Try harder next time, and put more effort into it.
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X8-Bliss
on 6/3/2008 12:10:04 PM with a score of 0
Ugh. No. It's too linear. And I don't like it
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evilplaster
on 5/3/2008 11:43:18 PM with a score of 0
It's "meh" at best. Next time, try harder on your stories.
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Anubis
on 4/19/2008 2:02:49 PM with a score of 0
Good... For you to poop on!
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Aerostar
on 4/15/2008 10:58:33 PM with a score of 0
That was a really weird game.
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Conneth
on 3/14/2008 11:13:14 PM with a score of 0
no offence but that was really LAME!!!
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emma101rox
on 3/5/2008 8:17:14 PM with a score of 0
Not totally incomprehensible, but waaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaay too short.
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Rommel
on 2/15/2008 2:09:38 AM with a score of 0
Lame! finished in less than 10 seconds, HA!
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th*mage*of*kings
on 2/13/2008 8:54:55 AM with a score of 0
I finished this game it less than 15 seconds!
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bobmcbob
on 2/11/2008 10:49:18 PM with a score of 0
4/8 Way better then homework. Haha, it's short.. but that's ok, I like short. Keeps my attention. XD
Over all, It's was ok. Not great. I might play it again...
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Zero
on 2/10/2008 3:46:11 PM with a score of 0
4/8. I think I got every ending. Funny... I was eating ice cream in the game while I was eating ice cream in real life. I like ice cream.
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Expander
on 2/9/2008 6:37:43 PM with a score of 0
Insulting the reader is never a good way to go. Try putting some more effort into your character development, PLOT and grammar for future stories.
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JJJ-thebanisher
on 2/7/2008 11:11:53 PM with a score of 0
Pros: The stuff about robots and zombies was kind of funny.
Cons: Poor spelling and grammar, not much plot.
Overall, it feels like a game that was thrown together in a couple of hours. Seems like if you spent a little more time on the next game, it might be pretty good.
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Sethaniel
on 2/7/2008 10:25:58 PM with a score of 0
It was okay, but it really could have used a better storyline, and also not have been quite so random. Heh, I did find it kind of funny at some points though.
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SilverMan
on 2/7/2008 8:13:16 PM with a score of 0
hmmm, you need to add some complexity to this. i built a fort and i was done... a plot might be a good idea next time...
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Fleshnblood_78
on 2/7/2008 6:32:21 PM with a score of 0
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