Player Comments on Among the Dead

(More or less reposting what I posted in the writing workshop)
Pretty darn good! ^_^

However, I'd note that there's a good deal of punctuation errors, and not as much choices that should be in a CYOA. I'm pretty sure there's only one (or two tops) way to win, and it shouldn't be like that in a choosing story format.

Never been a fan of making separate chapters, I think a game like this should just be long and in one shot, rather than several different story games.
5/8

Much better! I would still prefer this all in one story rather than Chapters, but it is definitely worth continuing :)

I think it's worth continuing, but definitely not worth publishing to show us. When you do this, you hurt your ratings, because you get what you put out - which in this case is four pages of no choice. I gave it a 4. If you do finish it though and the quality remains the same, I'll come back and re-rate it much higher. For now though, your best be it to unpublish it and provide the link to folks you want to look it over, rather than keep it published and take a beating in the ratings...