Player Comments on Halo, or Hell, no!

WARNING: SPOILERS

I really liked it! I chose to temporarily not leave a rating, since it's unfinished. The writing is of a very high quality, in my opinion. The premise of the piece (as well as the diversity of choices offered at the very beginning) was quite interesting.

I'm not sure if you plan to have four separate routes or if you initially intended for both the human and purgatory routes to immediately end, but I'd be interested in seeing these routes expanded upon more. Though I did like how you cleverly worked the big bang into the purgatory ending. I'd love to read this project when it is finished. Best of luck!

It was fantabulous, even for an unfinished story game, it was one of the best I have read in a while. I really liked the openness and the concept of you being able to choose your own afterlife. This concept would be good for anisogamy and would make it really interesting, but your writing style really emphasized it and amplified it making it really good.
I really enjoyed your game and it was very unique. Your title was nicely written and matches the story game perfectly. I encourage you to continue on with your story game and keep on writing and diving into it. It has a lot of potential and could honestly in my opinion if you kept on working on it, be one of the top 5 games on this site.
As you can tell by now I really, really enjoyed your story game and honestly, I find it hard to critique you on anything. But here’s what I got like Zake said be consistent in your choices is you list something in order keep it in that same order it will make it easier for the average CYAoan reader. If I’m going to be honest were not all that smart. When your fully finished with your story, proofread it. Believe just a few spelling and grammar errors could tick anybody on a writing website off. Make it easier on yourself and the rest of the community by proofreading it yourself to make sure you wrote down what you wanted. Also, when have other people proofread some other perspectives won’t hurt that much.
But for the most part your story absolutely rocks, and I love the idea. Overall, I personally think you should delve deeper in and write more. But if your looking to write a shorter story go ahead and do that. Just have other people proofread it when its fully finished.