Player Comments on Heavy Rain2 intro.

Clean it up a little and it will get better marks. At least you had a fair amount of choices, so that's a good start.

I'd like to rate this more than a 1 but to be honest I can't. Obviously it was really short but my problem was the way it was set out made it really hard to understand. One second you were using speech marks, then you were using the * symbol and then for some reason you were using a semicolon to show what people were saying. It all looked really strange, especially at the end where it says "Ethan; smells delicious." My advice would be to take the game down and edit it so that instead of writing the person's name and then a semicolon, you just put what people say in speech marks and then write who's saying them.