Player Comments on Lord of the Flies sample

it was ok, but random, no way to win, you only die, either path you choose you end up in the same place, and i haven't read the book, but i think the piglet's supposed to be my friend.

While your writing is good, and you do a great job of mimicking Golding's style, there just isn't any substance to this story at all. Too short, and not true to the book. Piggy wouldn't attack me for that. I felt like you quickly lost inspiration.

I've done everything possible to finish it. Is there even a way to do so? You have an excellent writing style, great grammar, but I died to the pig horde, the T Rex, and the boys eating me, not to mention the squid. Hints?