Player Comments on Prince of Demons

LOVE IT!!!

I'm unpublishing this because again, it's not really a choose-your-own-adventure. Every link either puts you in one direction or kills you. Also, you should focus on the technical aspects of writing. Frankly, the effort level was just too low.

You had a great idea, and if you put a little more work into it, you might have had a great story. I was a little dissapointed that it was over so quickly and that you made your death come without warning and for no good reason.

Also, Hades refers to the Greek version of Hell, which has no demons and the leader of it is Hades, not Lucifer. I would suggest editing it and changing Hades to Hell in order to make it more accurate.

Ok.

There was no challenge whatsoever to this... story, if you could call it that. You don't know what anyone looks like, and the plot isn't very well thought-out. There wasn't a lot of trouble in taking over the "allmightly Lucifer" who really wasn't all that powerful if it merely required a gust of wind to subdue him. And while you described Lucifer's voice, that's the only description you gave about any of the characters. Why does The Devil even have a wife? I thought something like holy (or unholy, if you prefer) matrimony would be against his "morals".
You had a good initial idea, but I don't believe you really had anywhere to go with it.

way too short. you just got too short pages. I mean... your game sucks. sorry. The first two clicks and i was dead.

Extremely short and had very abrupt endings. Otherwise it wasn't so bad.