Player Comments on Suburban Tales: On the Inside

please don't post unfinished games.

good grammaar

That's one lying description.

It's ok, but nothing actually happens. Your writting style is fine and there isn't as many spelling errors as most of the stories on this site. You need to flesh the story out somewhat and build the character up more. A good start, but can't rate highly as it's not engaging in it's current state

Well the writing wasn't bad and I know it's short 'cos it's just the intro but I guess my problem with it is that I kind of didn't like the character I was playing. Things like window shutters don't make me angry :p

A good attempt.Perhaps your next story will be better???

Not too bad, quite linear though, could lengthen certain pages like the video game or television one

Pretty short, I didn't detect any grammatical errors though, so good job on that.

It seems uninspired. If you look at the best games on this site (like Ducky Park), you will find that they embody everything that is pure and beautiful about the world. Your game embodies the mediocrity of a mundane suburban life. That said, it did a pretty realistic job of depicting such, so it earned a 4/8.

I hope 2 will be better.
I gave it a 5 because it is pretty interactive.
Potentialy a 8 if two is longer and more outside the box.