the biggest fight.
"Too few ratings to be ranked"
Played times (finished )
"Run through the jungle"
"Make sure not to blink"
"Appropriate for all ages"
Stories with this maturity level will not, by design, have any potentially objectionable content. An example of a type story with this rating would be a quiz on mathematics.
in this story you are a man trying to beat some men that want to kill you. this is my first story and don't expect very much from it.
Oh my favorite part was when I "Punced" the guy, and the part were "thei"discover you. And when
one of them comes "to wards" you
on 11/29/2016 11:31:53 AM with a score of 0
Yet another pointless waste of space to throw on the trash heap.
If you're not going to put effort in, dont bother writing.
Be more descriptive, stop giving readers pointless choices, get your spelling right.
on 12/12/2008 2:48:07 AM with a score of 0
Oh shit when I tried to "punc" him his "uzzi bullet" fuckin' killed me! But hey, I'd rather die then play this again.
on 12/11/2008 5:14:09 PM with a score of 0
I managed to kill them... yet I feel no sense of accomplishment. Also, I don't mean to sound rude but --- Is English not your first language? You misspelled 'Punch' more than once.
on 12/11/2008 2:27:44 AM with a score of 0
"You unhide yourself"?! Um, that's not even a word.
Seriously, I'm willing to accept that "uzzi" for "Uzi" is a legitimate spelling mistake, but "punc" for "punch" is just lazy typing.
You gave multiple choices on each of the pages I saw, so that's good. But there wasn't really any plot to the story, and you needed to proofread before publishing.
on 12/10/2008 11:22:58 AM with a score of 0
You know, this story was..was AMA-..
Oh wait, it was terrible. It'd be nice if you spent time on your game. This isn't some stupid thing you can blow off, this is YOURS and should be treated as such, proofread, edited, detailed, complex, it should be worthy to have your name on it and you should be proud. And this go for all new writers out there.
BE PROUD OF YOUR WORK, IT IS YOURS!
on 12/6/2008 10:17:18 PM with a score of 0
proof reading could go a long way
on 12/6/2008 12:41:00 AM with a score of 0
Epic fail. Do not forget to proof-read. Oh and be creative.
on 12/5/2008 8:25:00 PM with a score of 0
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