Player Comments on The Reaper
...It's alright. There are a few grammar and spelling errors that I'd be happy to fix. Something to note is that whenever someone speaks you need a new paragraph. But all in all I like the plot of the story. Though more detail would be good. And you don't need to do the whole (girl's name here) and (arch-enemy). you can give them names.
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fergie14233
on 11/2/2011 10:01:53 PM with a score of 0
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