Player Comments on The 28th Hunger Games

When you join the careers there is an end link, why is that? Still keeping my original rating
1/8

worst ever

Game sucked so much ass it could be called the 26th Ass-Eating Games.

I liked it but one problem where am I supposted to lick to get to the next part?

It seemed to easy for a level five.

Well this is one of the stories I found odd.

There was little in the way of explanation or introduction so I assume you went with the 'everyone knows hunger games' but then also skipped any character development or training etc. that might draw a player into the story.

So again I made an assumption 'the author is skipping those bits as all they want to write is a survival in the arena story'. But then each page was only a sentence, there was no elaboration and the game ended after a few pages no matter the choices.

There also appear to be messed up links as the gender of 'Jordan' swapped a few times.

Add in some background and char development, put more then one or two sentences on each page and make it longer and your ratings might go up.

This game sucks and is like 3 sentences long. What???

Strange structure for a story game. Instead of immediately ending the game, give us a chance to click the "go back" button.

And instead of skipping an EXTREMELY important training, and the MORE IMPORTANT character development, include that in the story please.

The concept is good but it was a bit bizarrely constructed. Text like "Jordan was not expected to survive, for she was blind" sounds a bit like something that could have come out of the King James Bible and the descriptions are way too brief: I've read the books and seen the films and was still baffled by what was going on. The Hunger Games are a terrific topic for good writing but unfortunately this wasn't.

Waaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaay to short and boring

I really, really wanted to see a well-made Hunger Games remake, because those books are perfect for the interactive fiction genre, and therefore I hoped to see this more fleshed out than it currently is.

First of all the writing was dull. This is because you told the reader what was going on instead of describing it. For example, you could have described our scenery, the other tributes, what the protaganist is thinking, etcetera. However you wrote in a "then you went over and saw this person and then you did this" type of way, which was not engaging at all, nor immersive. I didn't see a lot of grammar mistakes, but that was in part due to the low amount of words on the page, I would think.

Because of this writing, it really seemed like the game jumped around a lot. For example, one second I'm minding my own business, the next I'm getting ambushed, the careers are asking me to join them, etcetera.

Thirdly, the way this game was put together is kind of strange. I choose to be a girl, but later in the story, Jordan is referred to as "she", which doesn't make any sense. Because of your writing, I had to re-read several parts to understand what was going on. Also, the endings were the most bizarre I have ever seen! When I slept, it ended. When I went this way, it ended. When I joined the careers, it ended. The problem was that it was so abrupt and left me asking the author for an explanation, though I doubt the author could produce an adequate one. The way these endings were so abrupt made it look like the author was lazy in stitching this together, and so when making an ending, just created a direct "End Game" link and said "Well what the hell, the readers know why, so there isn't any reason for me to explain it,". You have to get rid of this idealogy and actually put the words on the paper.

In the end I did not like this. I felt there was so much room for more meat and more expansion. 2/8.