Player Comments on The Murder of Mary Jane Kelly PART ONE INTRODUCTION

In addition, the age reading can be considered to be about the same audience of the Hunger Games and other books : teens. I don't find any content that requires the consent of an adult to watch, so the age rating for older teens isn't needed.

Your branches are somewhat linear, as multiple links can lead to one page, but your variety isn't overwhelming, and the paths a player can take make logical sense so far.

Overall, I can say that this story is interesting, but it will need improvements on the aspects of choice, length, and audience target.

A piece of advice : if you're going to have multiple endings on this game, do make sure that you take extreme care to make several beginnings in part 2 that will correspond with part 1 endings.

A good start but waaaaay to short. never publish an an complete story.

The starting font was a little much and the sudden ending was horibal, in the end there was no story or game play every action leads to the same ending and it's very short.

cool

Synopsis has me intrigued, as well as your diction and your style. As for the genres, I don't see a reason to put in angst if there's no inner conflict in the variable character we play as. There's no ground to say this is related to angst in any way.

Putting (Your name here) Is terrible.
Give the player a name.
I cant immerse my self if I am "nameless protagonist one"

It's very short, but it's a good game.