Player Comments on Vias

Hmm... just thought that the miss fighting style reminds me of missy as in Miss, feminine style. ;D

Wow. The font just surprised me greatly. I actually needed to lean back. Work on your spelling and grammar please. :)

It started off as mostly dialogue, and I had a vague idea of setting, though it wasn't bad.

The story was pretty good. :D Your use of words and description was decent. For some reason, it didn't actually hook me. Perhaps you could also work on that?

3/8 too many spelling mistakes and many of the words are incorrect. Distracted too much from the story. I cant really say if I liked it or not because I got to a point i just wanted to get out of the story and clicked randomly. If the grammar spelling and the wrong words were corrected, I think this would be much more interesting

Quite long, very humorous at points. Overall a really superb story :)
One more thing, have you proofread your story? There were a couple of points where I had to re-read sentences. But other than that, you made a very good job on it.