Player Comments on alleyway escape

Was Ok but I finished it in 30 seconds and it was also boring 3/8

You shouldn't be here.

It's obvious that, for one reason or another, you're to inept to even start to write a storygame. This is a rambling mess with terrible grammar, no characters, and no plot to speak of. It is just over 1500 words. That's unacceptable.

I would give you the advice I give to everyone, but honestly it's pointless . I very much doubt you'll ever contribute anything of note. Learn to fucking read.

1/8

Deercan, please capitalize the first letter in a sentence, and try not to add so many exclamation marks. This story didn't have many choices at all, and there were many grammatical errors. The amount of text on each page was extremely saddening, and you should definitely write more. The plot of your story wasn't well developed, and if I were you, I would settle for another plot or fix this one up. Before you publish another story-game, ask someone to review it for you before you release it to the public.