Player Comments on Azure Skies
Yeah, what mizal said. It was a decent ~3 pages though.
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Crescentstar
on 3/16/2017 6:19:54 AM with a score of 0
I assume you're from the same class as the bee story guy. Again, the writing is decent compared to what we usually get when class projects pop up here. There are a few punctuation errors and some of the wording is a little awkward and amateurish, but I'm not sure how old you are.
The main issue is this is just too short. It ends just as its getting started and there isn't much branching.
Next time you do something for a school project, I'd recommend leaving the story unpublished in your profile, turning on sneak peek, and just giving the link to your teacher.
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Mizal
on 3/13/2017 10:28:04 PM with a score of 0
you are awesome!
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PiyaPlays
on 3/2/2017 9:43:31 PM with a score of 0
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