Player Comments on Between war and peace

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Ummm... My ending seemed like a completely random event..... That is strange :O

Yeah... you tried at the beginning but seemed to get tired towards the end but this needs correct spelling, punctuation, a better storyline and more interesting details. You had a good use of the links and did make some effort with the story but it seems you wrote the whole story in one two hour sitting because you got tired by the end, good stories take time, effort, rewrites and edits etc.

Who da heck is pretending to be me?!

well, I admit my impersenater is right. this sucks!

Lacked punctuation, at points, grammar, and it lacked basically everything. One paragraph on almost every page, and what was lacked in quality, was also quantity.

What I mean is, it's way too short, it wasn't consistent, and seems like it was made within a few hours. Story was linear, nothing made sense. It might be your first game, and maybe you did this as a small test. But whatever it was, it wasn't a great start on all stories to come from you.

So saying, this will most likely be un-published. You made an attempt, but it didn't seem like much effort went into this. It's very disappointing.

...I'm going to let those periods tell you what I think about this game. There is no reason for words. Just....no. No.

This is obviously your first game. it lacks anything! I'm sorry, this game will problably be deleted anyways. just giving you advice: It could take YEARS to master storygames.