Player Comments on Beware of Dog

I feel sad that anyone would eat dogs and it hurts me to know that they are being raised in such cruelty. Chickens, pigs, ducks, cows and pretty much all farm animals are raised with carelessness. They live a life of agony and boredom. And they die everyday. It's not what they deserve. Please talk to the owner of the "Dog Meat Restaurant" and tell her to take it down. It is mean and terrible. And it offends me to read this.

Good writing, but a little short

Gave me a laugh.

Nice

this definitely is an unpredictable ending. weird.

The writing was good, but it was a short one. 6/8, and nice sense of humor :)

they both "got excited" on my shoes

Feels like a "starter game." The writing is good, but the story is quite short. I've never been a huge fan of "bad things happening to a random person for no reason" as a form of humor. Overall, though, I would look forward to seeing another story from you.

I got the dog ran over. Well, that's what I get for leaving it out on the sidewalk, near the road. Yep, I should have seen that coming.

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This was actually a difficult storygame to rate. Your writing is quite good, and I found myself able to focus on what you were saying and not how you were saying it. That being said, the story was rather bland. It was too short to be immersive and I never "met myself" so much. I wasn't given any information that could have allowed me to connect with the character. This seemed like a rather halfassed effort, but you definitely seem like someone capable of writing something quite spectacular. I suggest browsing the tutorials in the H&I section as well as perusing the top storygames on the site.

-j.