Player Comments on Convict: Clive

What bothers me is that they're all formatted a certain way!
Intro
Option A/B
Option 2A or whatever
End

If you're in the second grade or so, this is pretty impressive!

If you're any older than that, you really need to work on your punctuation and the like. This doesn't seem to have been proofread very well, and it's such a tiny, tiny amount of text there's really no excuse for that.

Very little actually happens in this story, and how could it when the entire thing is literally less than 1000 words.

If you proofread for mistakes more carefully and wrote out a longer plot with more options and paths this would be a much better story.

Also be careful of point of view switching because this randomly jumps from second to first a couple of times. (You vs I)

Well, at least it was better then your classmates.