Player Comments on Day 2

Hey I finally found a place where I can stop bullies.
There is a typo on the page right after you take the oath, it says a 'football fame close' I think it's supposed to be a C not an F.

8/8

This honestly might be one of the better school based stories, but it's just not a genre I can get very excited about. The grammar is fine--he even got the dialogue punctuation right--and while the plot is basically just a typical thing about a kid that goes to school and makes a friend or deals with bullies, there's a decent number of choices. The writing itself is also pretty clear and decently done.

There's really nothing wrong with this, except that I just don't find the story events very interesting, and this is generally not a popular category on the site for a reason. (I'm not sure if even high school kids like reading about ordinary high school kids...)