Player Comments on Journey Through the Wasteland

No idea what the hell that description's supposed to be.

The grammar here isn't exactly dog shit. There /is/ some kind of a story too, so that's another plus. But the story is just...bland. It's essentially the beginning of Fallout 4.

And good god..."part 1." DON'T. DO. THAT. The only exceptions for splitting one story into separate storygames is when the story is big enough to be able to split into storygames that are long enough to stand alone. If the length of this "part" is just 2/8, consider writing more. This is a writing site, after all, and there is no deadline to publish a storygame unless you're submitting a contest entry. Or just don't split your story into separate storygames. Create one big storygame, and possibly use the advanced editor to create chapters so that it's all organized.

3/8.

very short not much detail given to the story, characters, or background making everything seem to happen suddenly. You've got a good start but far from a complete story here.

This wasn't bad for your first game. It had story, and it was okay. Perhaps a tad bit linear, but that's okay.

I think you could improve this story a lot, by giving the protagonist a wider ranged backstory, and a more thorough description of the details of where we go, and what the places look like. As I said, not bad. ^_^

Way to short, no way that this could stand as it's own story either. You should go and take your time, don't rush the story just to get something out.