Player Comments on Property

I rolled my eyes when I read the description. It didn't look very promising. The plot seemed rather cliche.

But, as I read it, I began to thoroughly enjoy myself. This was very well written, and it had a wonderful mixture of humor, science fiction, and emotion.

The length was average. To make a storygame like this work, you should have more branching to help us understand the robots full extent and whatnot.

Some of the things in this game didn't make much sense, for multiple reasons. There was quite a bit of linearity, and sometimes things were just illogical.

Honestly, I felt you did a great job of fleshing out the characters and plot. The reader is left on a bit of a cliffhanger though :P

The setting needed work, because while it's usually taken for granted among more important factors of a story, a setting is very important. If you give a simple, brief explanation of the area the game takes place in, it's hard to picture said place. Thorough, detailed explanations really help with fleshing out settings in a storygame. :)

5/8, not bad.

A longer story would get a higher rating from me. Well-written with some minor grammar issues. I would like to read more about Mr. Roboto and Jules!

It was a little confusing because you did not address the counter argument of why robots shouldn't be citizens. I assume robots can live indefinitely with the aid of updates and proper robo health care, so wouldn't that cause overpopulation? If you combine that with the job shortage and probably a lack of land to live on, robots gaining these things would be a problem. If robots have free will and can make their own choices, some robots will inevitably become evil just as some humans are evil. If robots are programed with unchangeable morals, their creators can use their voting power to take over the world. This would require stricter regulation of sentient robot creation and raises the question, "What is the meaning of life?" of sentient robot creation.

Well, the game was overall good. I just hope the sequel, if there is one, addresses the counter argument.

Well, it seems a little short, but it's good. Also, it seems 'linear' because there seem to be very few endings. However, the concept is good, so definitely play it!

Is it not done? My ending was very dull and I'd prefer a better explanation WHY it ended. The story was great, nonetheless, and you are definitely a good writer.

I greatly enjoyed this game. It's a very intriguing concept and it stimulates thought on not only the issue of citizenship for a sentient robot, but also the citizenship/treatment of humans. Black people were considered property in America till 1865. They were treated as property, and we're not even given the dignity of a human being, exemplified by the 3/5th compromise. I encourage you to look up the plight of African Americans and their eventual freedom from slavery and them eventual gain of natural rights when expanding or creating a part two for this story. Great job!!

Pretty good.

I liked this quite a bit actually. I have often wondered if humans are confined to organic matter or if AI can become conscious like us. Your writing ability was superb except for using a /. I suggest that you do not use that.
Anyway, I loved the storygame. I just wish that it was longer, or in other words "what happens next?"

That was interesting, a bit of Ted 2 meets Chappie but it was well written, the characters were well fleshed out and the situation interesting. This was a little on the short side and seemed to end at an unecessary cliffhanger while I'd have preferred if the story had kept going but overall it was a good little story and I hope you write more to this :D