Player Comments on Red Embrace: Chapter 1
Before I forget, I advise you to unpublish it and then turn on the sneak peak mode. If you want further feedback, you can write a post about it in the forum and send us the link. :).
There are plenty people who want to read and give some tips.
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Darius_Conwright
on 3/3/2024 1:37:47 PM with a score of 0
It's good, real good or perhaps I say it out of excitement for seeing another gothic horror entry, but reading it made me smile.
I would have given it a higher score if you were to finish it. Plus I do think that the introduction of all your siblings were a little clunky, especially since they didn't matter that much in the broad scheme of the story. (You for example didn't need to name them. I would advise to focus more on the protag's relation with their dad, since he was the one who is about to be killed off in the beginning)
Plus: Garrett and Caleb could have been fleshed out a little more, but we'll see whether it happens in the unwritten chapters.
I like the action scènes. Love the way how you kept up the tension and overall tone pretty well. What I do want to see more is how the city looks like (it's probably a victorian city, so things do smell depending on the season)
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Darius_Conwright
on 3/3/2024 1:35:27 PM with a score of 0
LITERALLY THE BEST THING EVERRRRRRRRRR
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— Sam on 3/3/2024 1:24:39 PM with a score of 0
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