Player Comments on Roscoe's Evening Snack Adventure

Hi Althea!

I could really relate to your story, for I always eat snacks and forget to make real food. I also really liked how your character had a service dog! I love dogs!

Hi Althea!

I could really relate to your story, for I always eat snacks and forget to make real food. I also really liked how your character had a service dog! I love dogs!

Cute story. these are the sort of thoughts that go through my head when i'm hungry. I did feel like I had control over my options for the most part. However, choosing certain food and then going home without eating was a little unsatisfying.

The story was pretty engaging from how weird it was! The absurdity of sentient raw chickens was pretty entertaining. I felt like my choices did have weight, especially when it came to either fighting or running from the chickens. I also think that I had enough information to make these choices, considering the context of the story.

The story was very simple and clear to understand. I could read in a few minutes so that I could try many different ways to see what's happening on the other options.

The twist was engaging and had fun! because of funny elements and details such as raw chickens and the store Safeway sounds so familiar that I could more into it when I was reading.
No confusion while I read. Options were clear, too.
It would be even nicer if there is more detailed narration to imagine the scene.

It was soft of engaging at first, only because the options at first were cut short. However, one option was pretty long considering how many twists and turns there were. To me, that was by far, what was the most engaging. With that said, I felt like I did not have as much agency as to what I could do to finish the game. There was practically only one option that'll allow the player to win, and that is by playing it safe. It gave me enough information to make choices, but again it skewed me to make certain decisions that I did not really want to choose.

I liked playing as Roscoe and the set up was really nice and relatable. The decisions felt very low stakes so I didn't really care where I was going and sped through the game a bit so I could see the different endings. I definitely felt like I had control over what to do in my second run where I went to the grocery store. I guess it's because it offered more/longer game play. I had enough information to make decisions, and I enjoyed seeing a bit more into Roscoe's life with his pup!

Funny story. I like the various options that I had, and the outcomes were entertaining.

The story overall was not engaging and short. I went through every route possible in 5 minutes with the number of overlapping routes. I would suggest looking up a story prompt if your creative juices are running low.
I had the ability to control the story, however the events were bland. You could incorporate a talking animal to make the story more exciting.

The story was cute and fun, I liked the addition of the doggy it made me all warm and fuzzy inside. :) I felt like I had control over the story however some of the choices made me feel like the main character had depression choosing sleep overeating and feeding his dog.
There was a conflict in the story that gave it agency and the choices you made really felt like they affected the rest of your evening.
Overall the best game I've played on the website so far!

bad

The grammar was pretty competent, but I'm basically just left wondering why this was written. There's no plot, there's no room for a plot; it's less than a thousand words about a guy getting dinner.

If this was just a test of the editor, that's fine, but there was no real reason to actually publish it and it will be taken down soon for low ratings.

I'd really recommend taking time to read some of the higher rated stories on the site just to get an idea of what readers are looking for as far as quality level...and also because they're just really good.

You don't take time to, at least, present Roscoe character, we don't even know that we have a service pup until the middle game.

Then, your game doesn't have real choices, all are fake and without even a real reason for being so. There is no plot, and there is no dialogue, conflict or anything else.

It is just a random dude who wants to go to a fast-food but like he is a fagot; there are a lot of fake choices where he fakes go to a grocery or go home to immediately go out.

However, the biggest mistake is totally lack of punctuation, I am ESL, so I have bad grammar, but punctuation is key to reading the game. Please, read Gower articles in the Help section.