Player Comments on The Life to Live

"You go off at the age of nineteen and you try to live a life that you could have.There are many lives you can live you have to find a life to live.Your character gets older in those lives and you.Develope,and learn new things during your life.There's also a life the can just go straight,but there can be some turns in it.

The story's a little long,or maybe too long,It's a warning,or heads up."

Already confused the heck out of me just from reading all that above.
Too many mentions of lives and lifes and repetition of the same thing, just worded differently. The lack of any punctuation completely killed it, and I just ended up clicking rapidly through the entire game.

Great Game You did good. *highfive*

The ducked up grammar made me rate this a three.

If it had made more sense, It would have been pretty interesting.

I'd be glad to read this over again when it is fixed.

Three things:

1.) For the love of God, use your space key.

2.) Look up how to punctuate dialogue.

3.) More proofreading in general.

It looks like real effort was put into the actual writing, which makes it doubly a shame that the technical issues make this pretty much unreadable.

The story was a bit off to me. The protagionist had several Mary-Sue aspects to her, and your grammar errors (such as not putting a space after a comma) was quite frustrating to see.
Nonetheless, you clearly put effort into this storygame. I wish I could've rated it higher than a 3/8, but I can't until the grammar errors and the many pages with no choices were improved. Much of this could've been fixed by spending time editing your story. (Using a test-reader would be helpful as well.)