Player Comments on The Maize Runner

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I remember watching the movies years ago and this felt more like a parody than an actual story. That wouldn't have been as bad if there was some effort put in, but personally, it just fell flat and left me uncaring about any of the characters.
Choices felt weak and unimportant, I think the only choices that actually matter would be the ending, you could have at least attempted to make the illusion of choice more convincing, rather just making a linear storygame on a CYOA site.
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It was pretty fun really. Had a great laugh at some parts like that taper fade afro thing. (though I may be one of the VERY few...)

Except... It seems haphazardly made. Like you just up and wrote one day you just woke up. But still, a fun read. KEEP IT UP!!

I love it, it's really good. I like your writing and stuff but maybe try to make it a little longer. OK :) Can you make another story on the maze runner like a second one, I really like it. Keep up the good work!

XOXO Goodbye Darling

The grammar is alright and so is the style. The problem is the lack of effort and engagement that can practically be breathed in throughout the story. It had some parts that seemed to prompt a comical fanfiction but you never got around to develop them, and you played the dumb-character card once too many times for my liking. The fact that it was rather barren as far as actual choices go certainly didn't help.

You have the skills, you just have to put them to good use.

This wasn't bad, but it also wasn't great either. I've never watched the movies this is based off of, but it feels more like an unfunny parody than actual fanfiction.

The protagonist lacks any defining voice. There is never any emotion or much internal thought. I never felt any attachment to the character. There were very lackluster descriptions if any throughout the story and the entire scenario felt a little ridiculous. From what I remember of the commercials for the movie, it was a series of deadly and creative mazes/traps to navigate through. None of that was in this story from what I could see. Just a corn maze, with apparently deadly farmers and magical corn that grows enough to be edible overnight.

That being said, the story was to the point and kept a decent flow to it. It had a some of choices and two endings.Unfortunately a lot fo the choices felt empty because they all lead to the same path that then branches into one of two endings. This would have been forgiveable if not for the unremarkable characters and dialogue.

I would really like to see the author write something else on their own time that isn't a fanfiction. I feel like given more time and their own idea to work with, this author has potential to make something better than this. Just try to focus more on descriptions, emotions, and making the reader feel attached to the protagonist next time.

All in all, I give it a 3/8