Player Comments on Your Majesty

1. For crying out loud, finish your stories BEFORE you publish them.
2. It's not too hard to create two separate pages for each gender character, don't expect your readers to click the choice that corresponds to the character gender they chose.
3. This story is too linear. It looks like you're giving the readers separate choices when in fact you're really steering them down the path you WANT them to go down.
4. It's a bit short. The storyline isn't bad, but this kind of story (young leader of a sprawling realm) is really common. Make it different than all the other stories of its type.
5. Don't be afraid to lengthen the story, and create some choices that are RELEVANT to the story. I felt that this story was all, "You are Catherine/Matthew. You are this. You are that. Lead the duchy. Oh and by the way, what religion are you?." Have some smooth transitions so the reader doesn't feel like they're being dunked in ice water in one page and dunked in lava the next.

I get that the stuff I've just said is quite discouraging, but understand that this is constructive criticism, and if you try improving your story with stuff like this, it'll be a lot better.