Player Comments on Am I Real?
Ahh, another chicken! Glad to see someone has taste buds here.
-- Exotic Chicken on 2/11/2019 10:24:27 PM with a score of 0
Seemed like there were a good amount of options, but I dont know if they actually mean anything.
You see, when you write a storygame....generally you just do it, make it in full, then publish and if you have done a good job people will like it.
What people dont like is these shitty little "darr well if you like it I'll make more"
No one likes those and they never make more because theres no point in making a dozen shitty little 1k story.
If you're really serious however, get yourself a nice plot outline, decent characters and direction, then post in the writing workshop for some critiques ahead of time. It generally works much better than this crappy style of trying and failing to get interest.
on 2/11/2019 10:23:33 PM with a score of 0
The writing wasn't bad, but I was far too confused about what was going on. I get that that's the whole point of the first part but I think maybe a little background information would be more useful.
A lot of events felt really sudden and random, like I hid behind a pole and then suddenly, I was seen. Didn't seem like there was much point to that whole hide and seek part of the story.
Interesting concept, the whole 'you blew it up' part surprised me in a good way as it made me intrigued. I would recommend maybe developing your characters more before this point though, this would really make that part effective.
Anyway, the few endings I got definitely felt premature, keep working on it :)
on 2/11/2019 10:20:21 PM with a score of 0