corgi213, The Dramatist

Member Since

4/25/2015

Last Activity

10/1/2020 1:52 PM

EXP Points

800

Post Count

989

Storygame Count

2

Duel Stats

21 wins / 20 losses

Order

Marauder

Commendations

33

I sniff
I scratch
I bork
I slep
I-SQUIRREL

 

Quotes

"And if you want to write some very strange porn involving Steve, go ahead, I'm not gonna judge ... you weirdo." - Mayana

"God dammit, Corgi." - Steve

"The only problem with Corgi's story was the lack of branching for the most part.
Didn't mind it in general"
-EndMaster

"You idiot, you moron, you complete imbecile"- Mizal

 

"The name is not only all lowercase but includes numbers as well. A double whammy of malpractice among usernames. The entire thing is just misc quotes aligned with a pitiful sidebar where five years are shown to have gone by yet less than a thousand points or posts to show for it. I'm sure the two storygames make up for the lack--I mean, rarity, of activity.

3/8."-Fart

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Storygames

The Last Chieftain

The land of Orcin, a place where all are free to live as they wish as long as they follow the laws of the council.  Years of relative peace had ensued, making sure the orcs would live as strong and as free as they had always been.

The Mannate Empire, destined to consume everything on the horizon, sets its sights on the homeland of the orcs.  Annexing one kingdom, one empire after the next, finally looks to orcin for resources, troops, and land to settle, as they prepare their dreaded march.

Nolazir, a simple orc, who lives off the land as he works his farm, unknowingly would be drawn into events to come.  He would come to shape the world around him, and the future of Orcin.  

Fight for honor, love, peace, and prosperity.  Lead with a cruel fist, or a warm heart.  Challenges and tribulations lay ahead for all. 

Will you save your homeland and return it from the brink?  Will you let the darkness within and without consume you?  What becomes of you and the world, is up to you.

The next edition will come out in a few months, filled with more varied events between time jumps including, politics, monsters, and more!  Also will be adding the rest of the real story and the side branches in as well.

Special Thanks

Where to begin exactly?  I'll start off with thanking Mizal, who helped me with some proof reading and structure at the start, and helping me figure out how to use variables.  Also for always being willing to help with my writing, grammar, and developing characters all these years, and generally being a wonderful presence on this site :)

I would like to thank MoreCowbell for consistently proofreading and giving me feedback on my story throughout this long process.  I appreciate all of your spell checking, helping keep the flow and pace, and general positivity and motivation during this whole project. 

I would like to thank 3iguy for taking an interest in my story and beta reading it for me.  As well as Ebon for his detailed and insightful responses to some of my threads early on.

I'd also like to thank Ogre, IAP for encouraging me and keeping me motivated during the hardest parts of the process (mostly the end point).

Also would like to thank EndMaster for letting me rip off his organization scheme for storygames.

I really couldn't have done this without you guys, and I owe a great part of finally finishing this to all of you and to CYS as a general whole.

I hope you all enjoy!


The Pie

One guy on a quest...for magic crytals!  Unfortunately this is the land of Cystia...and things almost never happen as expected.  

What starts as a normal day turns into a mad quest for revenge, live the life of a dude turned into an evil....killer pie!

Will you find redemption?  Or will you truly be evil? No one cares!  


Asylum of Hunters
unpublished

The blood of men runs cold, the hour of the beast is nigh upon us.

Under starlight, the forsworn prepare for their ancient duty.

For the Pale Flame shimmers low, and the sanctity of the human mind must be shed.
 


Attack of the Savoids
unpublished

Dark-Brite
unpublished

My entry for Mizal's Lone Hero Contest.


Darth Vader
unpublished

Vader must face the hell that is the space DMV.


Doppenton
unpublished

Feel the suns warmth.

Breath that fresh air!

You are happy.

Your life is nice and cozy, it's a dream come true!

One day, you meet your own doppleganger.

What you do from here is up to you.

 


Dream Walker
unpublished

Forge
unpublished

In the wild, beastly lands of Velis Brum, many are prey to the whims and cruelty of men and monster alike.

A small village resides in the caves Manchor Vanit, it is here you have been born. Taught to remain close to the caves all of your life, you never caught a glimpse of what was beyond the mountains, and when you did it was often cruel and unsettling.

Your mostly quiet existence would end when Baglich would come to take your homeland, with their scum and barbarian fiends.

Gather family, allies, old foes, and create an empire suitable to standing up to this terror of the land.


Guide Us, Flames
unpublished

Hunter's Bounty
unpublished

Invidia
unpublished

A dispute, a broken promise.  The envy of one will break a kingdom.  

The half man, half dragon sorcerer Tarragon threatens your king, your home, your very way of life.  

How far will you go to make sure justice is brought to this foul madman?

Chose between to very different characters to embark on this epic quest, slay the dragon, save the princess, and restore honor to your kingdom.


Necronanny
unpublished

Evil Grannies Galore!


Quarry
unpublished

Come, rest your weary feet. 
Sit by the campfire, warm those hands.  You must be tired.  
Oh, you like stories do you?
Hmm, here's a story for you.  One that goes way back, to a time when the night ruled, and the howling of beasts would make any man tremble.  Relax, it's going to be a long one.


Salvation
unpublished


Sanctus Damnatorum
unpublished

Scourge
unpublished

An orc named Tumble, young, wild, and free.  

Life is great in a village nestled in between the mountains, the birth place of the great Orc race.  But for the past century a series of brutal crusades have left them divided and broken.

The Mannate Empire threatens to swallow them whole, just as it has done with everyone else in its path.  But then one day an even bigger threat to the land rises out of the fires of fate, undeterred by the ravages of time. 

They call him Scourge.  His forces threaten the very land, and all of life as it stands now.  

Will Tumble play the role fate has dealt him and stop the evil Scourge?

Or will he abandon the world before him and find his own way?


The Silver Ghost
unpublished

Vigilant
unpublished


Yet Another Freaking Wolf Story
unpublished

Zombpocalypse
unpublished

An exercise in seeing how fast I can crank one of these out.


Recent Posts

#39 - Let's Make a Story Redux on 10/1/2020 11:06:32 AM

"Lol fag," the dream taunts Hakkan.


#37 - Let's Make a Story Redux on 10/1/2020 9:42:28 AM

The Lich King is slain and the nightmare ends, so Hakkan thought. 


Feedback on 9/29/2020 4:22:35 PM

I tend to use commas for stuff like "Gower smiled as he punched me, his pearly whites shining bright."

Dont think Ive ever used a semi colon.


#35 - Let's Make a Story Redux on 9/27/2020 8:54:06 PM

"Lol fag," the Lich King says.


anyone wanna collab? on 9/24/2020 5:14:32 PM

That usually never works out.

If you know how to do the writing then do the writing by yourself.


Born A Poor Black Child on 8/1/2020 4:37:29 PM

Noobs: "Daaar."
CYS: "He doesn't realize he is dealing with sophisticated people here." murders noob


wOrLdS SaDdEsT sToRy on 7/27/2020 9:47:31 PM

I havent read much if the thread but...

Puds, I like you, but I pee on you. A lot of pee.

I pee on those dumb fuckers that took six blocks of seattle. I especially pee on the perpetrators of the numerous shootings in that area. Im glad that the police apparently rode in there a while ago and gave them the ass beatings their parents forgot to. I hope they made the guy leading the thing cry like a bitch.

I saw a video of a bunch of veterans who got into a fight with those antifa asswipes. The majority of the antiffies trying to swing got swung on and I only wish I could have been there to literally pee on one. Thise vets deserve some trophies.

I pee on anarchists, communists, rioters, all the other similar scum and wanna be not so civil rights activists.

I pee on anyone that doesnt love our flag and the beautiful constitution and what it stands for. 

I drank alot of water to prepare for this and my bladder hurt a lot, but the relief was so much more sweeter.


Yoink: Baiting and Hooking Thread 4 on 7/27/2020 8:31:41 PM

Obligatory peeing


Stats: Annoying or Just Pointless? on 7/11/2020 3:38:31 PM

I think stats are cool as long as they all serve a purpose at some point or another, unlike most of cogs flavor stats, and their flavor choices that also dont mean anything.

If the thing in question is going to offer multiple sets of consequences of varying degrees based off a stat, I could get behind stats. Maybe even if they can help drive the story forward in some way or serve as a way for the protagonist to solve various problems based off their skills or fail horribly for lacking the skill, or fail more or less horribly depending on the skill level. Which is one work around to consider.

So do you throw the character into social situations where they cant use their intimidation or strength stat and are forced to improve social stats, or let them awkwardly blunder through threatening everybody. Honestly the first sounds like it could tick the struggle and satisfaction part of someones brain. And you have a more fleshed out and well rounded character for it, perhaps even if they fail they have some minor success in the exchange and get a little stat boost because of it.

Usually stats takes the focus off the story and the importance of making the right choice. "Hey, it doesnt matter if I make a blunder in my choices because I can just muscle or charisma my way through it." So having a way to reconcile the two or fix that would be dope.

It sort of takes all the heart out of the characters struggle and upholding their ideals on a narrative level when done poorly. I think games that realize this tend not to get too wrapped up trying to take the plot too seriously and let people enjoy it for the number crunching thing it is, are generally the most successful storygames with stats. They sort of remove the chances for serious bulnders and are played for the funsies rather than emotional involvement.

And usually the goal of the game is to slay the big bad and take the treasure trove which will increase in game monies because its all about the numbers.  Even though there isnt really much tension or suspense.

Otherwise failing to blend them would take the tension out of a scene, knowing you can get through it simply because the numbers are up. So thats something else that would require some kind of creativity to successfully merge. 

However, if it was done well then it could actually be really satisfying. A character with heart and personality, and a story with scope and ambition that also works well with being an rpg. 

Big narrative stories like Eternal focus more on the aspects that make a character memoriable in ways simply getting bigger numbers cant. If Eternal did go the route of using stats, for that particular style of storygame it would cheapen the experience (or perhaps not, I feel like End could also merge them well if he was inclined to use stats).

Yeah really the issue I am beginning to think isnt even with stats but the fact the majority of people that try to blend it all together fail because they put no effort and thought into it, and at a place like cog they are often rewarded and praised for their bland work.

Normally I would be tempted to say it should really just be either or when it comes to storygames (stats or no stats). I feel like you have a pretty good idea worked out for how to blend narrative and story with numbers together, having experience with both things. 

I think as long as you make the choices AND the stats matter in a convincing way it should be good. Honestly its probably easier than it would seem. The only real difference being that it takes some effort to do, which not a lot of cog authors seem willing to do.

Anyways I am confident you would be willing to put in the effort and thought to make it all work and I cant wait to read your epic when its done.

Im not sure if Ive actually answered the question or not but to boil it down it all comes to the stats mattering, having a visible effect, and flowing seamlessly into the story. 

Anyways, good luck on the epic and have fun with it.


Blue Whale Challenge on 7/5/2020 6:58:19 PM

dope