ghost11, The Wordsmith

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I'm 15 and write as a way to keep my mind off things. I also love reading, especially crime and thriller. If you have come across any good books in these genres, let me know! I really appreciate feedback on what I write and will take it all onboard to try and make myself a better writer. 

Currently I'm working on a little random story to get the hang of choose your own adventure writing :)



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Sucks to be New Zealand on 3/15/2019 3:56:22 PM

Thank you for your thoughts. This is really something no-one would have ever expected here and is wrong on so, so, many levels. 

Starting to write/ how to pace effectively on 3/11/2019 11:45:21 PM


Starting to write/ how to pace effectively on 3/11/2019 11:37:39 PM

Yeah, I definitely agree with your point there. Writing in 2nd person for the first time was really odd and felt quite wrong, and having to use present tense also was quite uncomfortable for me. I haven't really experimented with writing in 1st or 3rd person for a CYOA yet, but I think I will prefer to remain more 'traditional' in that sense and stick to 2nd person perspective.      

One of the hardest things I've found about writing in second person is to make a choice whether it's a self inserted character (they play as themselves) or to create a character for the reader to play as. Both have their pros and cons, and I find I've kind of drifted over this issue so far and not really committed myself to a side. I initially planned on making it be a self-inserted character but then I found myself giving the main character a lot of distinctive personality I'll probably have to go back and re-do a lot of my work later. Which will be annoying, but needed.

Starting to write/ how to pace effectively on 3/11/2019 5:35:10 AM

After only starting to write fiction a couple months ago, there’s a lot of things that consistently trip me up when trying to write.

One thing I have found to be difficult when writing is pacing and specifically how to seamlessly change from dialogue into pieces of long descriptive writing and vice versa. I feel that when I attempt this it is a sudden change and can be disengaging for the reader.

Example from my writing (this passage follows a long-ish description of what has happened in the last 6 months):


Today marks six months since your arrival. You've learnt a lot, and every few days Christoph praises you, saying that Ayr is nearly perfect. Today is one of those days, and as you sit in the research lab he approaches you.

"You've done great kid! Your research is really helping us to make great progress with Ayr," he says with a smile.


I think that this example (above) is quite an awkward way to go about changing from a slow-paced description into fast paced dialogue. I’ve been trying to include a sort of ‘linking sentence’ like ‘Today is one of these days…’ but it still doesn’t feel quite right to me, and it’s also not something I can consistently use as it starts to become repetitive. 

On a similar note, I also find it hard to change from scenes of lots of description, (where nearly every second is accounted for) into a paragraph describing the events of the past day or so. When I try to do this, I find that it reads as very random and again can be quite disengaging. 

Anyway, that’s just what I’ve found the most difficult about writing so far. If anyone has any advice around this or wants to share what they have found difficult when starting out, go for it :) 


Help! How do I continue from my last save? on 2/15/2019 12:28:00 AM

go to 'My Stuff' and then go onto 'Saves', and press 'restore'. :) 

Has anyone read Six of Crows? on 2/9/2019 8:10:45 PM

yeah, was also pretty damn good. Amazing twists once again and I also loved exploring the backstory of the characters, especially Inej. They're just so cool, and even though some of them are pretty typical character types, (dark past, tortured, cold hearted- Kaz) it was so well done I didn't even care. I now want more books to explore the characters even more, I just really want to read more about them! Then again, I don't think a third book is really needed even though I will really miss Kaz, Inej and Jasper. And Matthias....  :((


Has anyone read Six of Crows? on 2/9/2019 6:20:12 PM

yep, one of my favourites :) 

Loved the characters, the author did an amazing job portraying them and their different mannerisms and skills. The world was also very fascinating and the plot was gripping- when they are on their way to Ice Court it's just... SO GOOD

Flying on 2/2/2019 12:20:35 AM

Thanks guys! I really appreciate your feedback. I kind of forgot about this piece, so it was nice to see it again, especially as this time being able to spot my own errors- which I didn't see two weeks ago. :)

Seekers of the Imperial Seal on 1/25/2019 4:25:08 AM

Read the story and really enjoyed it! I found it quite intriguing, especially the fight scene. Not many people can write good fight scenes but you nailed it. It was also funny, I liked the little story about marrying a donkey. One thing I found a little bit odd was the huge sum of money you pay to the Fox, when she admits that it was easy and Daniel could have done it himself. Wouldn't he have tried himself first before going into through the trouble of finding the Fox? Also, does the Fox have short boy-length hair? It seems unlikely that Daniel would have tapped her on the shoulder otherwise. 

I'm excited to read what's to come, good luck! 

P.S On the 'Disco smackdown' page you said 'clugoer' which I assume is a typo and meant to be clubgoer? 

Need; a poem by Asher Childress on 1/19/2019 4:23:22 AM