ghost11, The Wordsmith
Recent PostsCYS Book Club: Book Nine on 11/26/2019 7:00:48 PM
Although a new release, I'd like to select @Bill_Ingersoll 's Woban Island . I think it's just Ninja that's gotten to it so far, so it should be good to get some reviews and discussion headed over there. She doesn't look like a short story, and with most of the book club having thanksgiving, maybe this could be a two week job?
Sorry for the lack of participation from me over the past few weeks, I've been pretty busy with school stuff but that wraps up fairly shortly so I should be good to go from here.
New member! on 11/15/2019 10:53:09 PM
kia ora :)
Important CYS Outpost Assignment on 10/8/2019 8:05:13 PM
Added both Marooned on Giri Minor and its sequel to the IFDB
Tally Ho, Chapter Four on 10/8/2019 5:02:45 AM
Lock picking seemed to have worked well enough last time, so let's go with Option 1. Option 3 also takes my fancy but time!! The hunt's nearly over go fast Alfred go go go
Tally Ho, Chapter Four on 10/7/2019 5:59:19 AM
Option 1. Curious to see what's in the box. Both one and two take the same amount of time, and picking a lock is presumably going to make less of a mess of the box- and be quieter- than forcing it open.
Tally Ho, Chapter Four on 10/3/2019 12:48:37 AM
Tally Ho, Chapter Four on 10/2/2019 5:38:18 AM
going with Option 6 again
CYS Book Club: Book Seven on 10/2/2019 12:00:49 AM
Sorry for being so slack on these for the past few weeks.
I’ve posted my comment for this week’s one.
My first impressions of this game- just a few pages in- were that it was a light-hearted and cheerful story. This impression was upheld, as I found myself reading through a story that had no shortage of jokes. I enjoyed these little jokes slipped in here and there, and the amusing ways in which I could suddenly and unexpectedly die. Normally, sudden deaths are annoying and take away from the story, but the nature of this story meant that they were funny instead of tiresome.
I liked how the story was centred around the goal of getting the princess. While the whole ‘get the girl’ set-up did make for a bit of cliché, it was nice to have a core goal in the back of my head whilst reading through. However, it also sort of limited the story as there wasn’t much opportunity to branch off and have another adventure that diverted from the main story.
Most characters that I came across in passing were described briefly, and I found it interesting that the princess happened to be the only one that did not happen to possess an unattractive feature, and a LOT of overweight men seemed to appear.
I can’t help but feeling that this story sort of lacked in ambition. Of course, it works as a decent story as it is, and I did enjoy reading through it. I just feel that the author had a good handle on all the things that make up a good story, but aside from the humour, nothing really stood out to me. The cliché of the pot and array of mostly unoriginal characters, which were mostly entertaining but largely forgettable, could’ve easily been transferred over to create a more original and impressive story.
Now I’m not sure about this, but I think once you reach the end of each chapter/Act all the previous choices don’t further play into the story. This sort of made the story feel more ‘gamey’ as you had to pass through the stages without dying. It was cool how all three of the Acts each had a separate focus and played a different part in reference to the overall plot of the story.
Generally, I had a lot of fun with this story. However, I didn’t read it all and found that I sort of got tired of the humour after a while. The riddle was an interesting addition to the game. It was largely effective as without it, I doubt I would’ve continued reading to find more endings.
Evidently a lot of work went into this story, and overall the author did a lot of things that worked effectively. As it stands, the story is good. It’s enjoyable. It just lacks that extra something that makes a story *great*.
Reading the other reviews, I think my feelings on this story are mostly similar to Bill’s, although to less of an extent. I enjoyed the story, just not enough for me to find multiple endings after the ‘winning’ one. The humour also grew stale after a while, and it became a bit of a drag to get through. Maybe I’m un-fun, but I really didn’t think the story was as funny as I had anticipated from the reviews. It had its moments, but was not something I’d ever come back to read again.
Tally Ho, Chapter Four on 10/1/2019 2:13:17 AM
Tally Ho, Chapter Four on 9/30/2019 3:34:50 PM