Player Comments on Cybermon Zombpocalypse

The best advice I can give you is to use commas. People will find your writing much easier to read. Also, just a general spell/grammar/word check would've been great and would have enhanced my experience with this short "story".
As for the story, well... It's bad. Really bad. I didn't even really get the point of why you created this game. Nothing very significant happened. It was just some guy who wakes up and kills like one zombie. (At least that's what happened in my path) Very pointless. Why not make this a significant time for the protagonist? 2/8 from me.

The language of English terrible display this of is. Oh sorry was stuck in that mode of speaking after reading it for 15 pages. I'd leave a real constructive critic if I thought for one second that the author truly wanted to improve their writing, but with the rash of similar stories lately I have my doubts. If perhaps I'm mistaken please let me know and I'll gladly leave you a more helpful comment.

Good try, really short though

There are many things that could be said about this, but I'm very tired so I'll just take my point and go.

Really, the title, description, and author's reg date tell you all you need to know.

The English language suffers another war crime.

I couldn't get involved with the story, kinda boring.