Player Comments on MAG The college years, Freshman year.

that was not what i expected, certainly lower than my expectations. there are many grammar and spelling errors and the story did not flow properly

What the heck??? There was almost NO times when you could choose your own patj, and when you DID, you either died, or continued the 1-path story. So. Annoying.

No point of the game you have no name no room no anything

I just wanted this to be over so I could get my point and ended up randomly clicking.
The first page alone was giving me a headache when I tried to understand it.

Fuck this

The spelling and grammar really needs improving. One word on the spelling test was spelled wrong. The word was "complain" and it was spelled "c-o-m-p-l-i-a-n"

I don't know if this story can be saved.

The most obvious problem is the grammar. Please learn grammar. Spelling was better, excale that during the 'spelling' test the correct answer was complian (not complain, which is the correct spelling of the word).

Secondly, it is horribly linear. Most of the times it was struggling to read through a paragraph, having the option of one link to click at the bottom, and reading through another paragraph. Add links! We want options!

Thirdly, the plot. As far as I could tell, we started out in college, played hockey, went to a camp, and then ended up in Afghanistan? Plot twists are nice, but I just felt as if this was a but too much of sudden plot shifts.

If you really want to save your story, I suggest asking someone for help and maybe coauthoring.

bad bad spelling

This is un-FUCKING-acceptable. Atrocious grammar.0/8

You barely get to DO anything and you have only one option most of the time........ lame :( 2/8

I have seen kinda bad games but the grammar in this is truely devistating. I will give a better rating when the spelling is fixed. DBZFAN

It was terrible

Wow that was stupid.

No punctuation indicates that you have put little to no effort in it. Cannot rate it higher than 1. 1/8

Stupid shit

not really a game its a story if anything

Iinear

It was OK but atrocious grammar.

I couldn't read it.

Ever heard about PUNCTUATION???

Sucks.

I died, like, right away. I mean to say, really?

bad spelling
bad story
no choices
just plain weird

Poor grammar
Hard to read
Too linear
Poor spelling
Jumbled words

Too linear, but a good idea.

What do you have agaist Pittsburgh?
Good game 6/8

Nice story, but sort of bad grammar and not enough choices. Plus, there was just too much jumbled text on each page. Still a good job.

Very linear and with many, many errors in grammar, punctuation and spelling And some people are completely mischaracterized!

I liked how the users of the site made appaerances in the game.

kinda too linear for me.

Like how you incorporated people from the site. Creative storyline. Still need to work on grammar, punctuation, and dialogue. Also, too linear and not nearly enough choices.

Good game. But there are some grammarical errors.

There wasnt a lot of choices, but the story was good! The story was hard to understand because of the grammar. otherwise, its very good!

Nice Game! Even though I don't even know half of the people,but i'l learn if i stay on the site.

I'm sorry, I just didn't like that game. By the way, aren't you like, engaged or something Alexp? If he decided to go to college now, if he hasn't done so already, it's kind of a bad time. By the way, what happened to Miccy2000? Even if a zombie just jumped outta nowhere and ate me I'd still be happy. No offence, but I'd rather die than live in that game anyway, LOL.

yea

Okay game? But very good storyline,I can't get over how good it is,never mind the spelling mistakes.

The gramar and spelling could use some work, but it was prety good. It needed less words and more links though.

Not that great of game, wouldn't recommend it as there were few to only one link choice. Your spelling needs a little work and there is little to no use of the adv editor (which isnt required), also the spelling test was very... bad. Could have been entered better, like what is the correct spelling:

Community
Comunity
Communty

If community is chosen, the page would display Correct, etc. I gave the rating of 4/8 since there was description on the page and a plot.

Nice game. But the spelling and grammar need REAL improvement.

That was mediocre. The grammar/Spelling/Choices sucked. The maximum choices a pag was 2, I bet there were about 8 more links then pages. That sucks, it was mostly a book... Whats up with ur spelling man? The spelling test was spelled wrong Ironic... (Complian), LOL. Horrible. Saying that though, I was presently suprised with your effort! 4/8.

That was a wonderful story, with interacting where it needed to be. There were a lot of spelling mistakes though, but I got through. I mis-spell things to. 8/8.

Not too bad,very good college game.

My game is done,please play it,and leave a comment.