Player Comments on Clowns n Cowboys

Reading this felt like a fever dream... Not necessarily in a good way. I think you've got the creativity there? But the run-on sentences, lack of punctuation, and general poor grammar made it a slog to read, which seems like quite a feat considering it's a short journey to the endings. Appreciate the variety of endings, but I couldn't be bothered to find them all because of the poor grammar. Maybe I'll give it another try after some editing.

Random premise was definitely creative, which I applaud, but the grammar mistakes, no character development, lack of comprehensive plotline, all made me cringe a little bit when reading this story.

I suggest proofreading, and maybe writing down a firm, clear list of the type of "game logic" you'd like your story to follow, then figuring out how to incorporate this into your story to where people could follow it.

awesome fucking swagger honestly

I recommend taking your story down, looking through the page layout of a few highly rated stories, and copying their use of the enter key before putting it up again.