benholman44, The Dramatist
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My goals I set in 2014 were finally met after a decade of hard work and mountains of bullshit. My new goals?
-Win my own personal trophy
-Win a contest
-Defeat EndMaster in a writing contest of some kind (granted, I'll probably fail at this, but that's what I said about the last three goals)
"Ben's life as far as I can tell has been one of turmoil and strife. He's been mocked, embarrassed by his baby mama who then eventually left him for a tranny. And he had some other issues after that.
But it's all been leading up to this moment. I myself shall usher him into the Gates of CYStia where he shall be Eternal. Awaited and Blessed." -EndMaster
"It's probably the most depraved thing I've read. And no, that's not a compliment." -Mystic, reviewing my story 'Terrorist'
"Don't forget the lighter! ^_^" -Avery_Moore
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Site Drama Before Baby Mama: 20
Succubus Expert: 25
Patriot: 50
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In this story inspired by Watership Down, you play as Hops, a average, run-of-the-mill rabbit forced to flee with the other furry woodland creatures as the Titans destroy your home.
Entry for Sherbet's Summer's End Synergy Contest.
A short horror story where you're hazed on Halloween night. While others are trick-or-treating, you're involved in a fight for your life.
Entry for EndMaster's 2024 prompt contest.
Story prompt: A game revolving around carrying out a terrorist attack. There's actually several within this game, the method and motivations varying depending on your playthrough.
Warning: this story, while not explicit in accordance with site rules, does have sections involving murder, SA, incest, bestiality, racial undertones, and societal class discrimination. Essentially you're playing as a sick fuck who's also rich. Also keep in mind that while your protagonist can complete their objectives depending on how you play, there is no 'happy ending,' per se.
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Escape the Dark Castle 2: TPK Bugaloo on 11/10/2024 12:23:38 AMSmith I guess.
How to play the game though?
Escape the Dark Castle 2: TPK Bugaloo on 11/10/2024 12:23:07 AM
This is great! I love TCat and Cel!
The BELATED Thunderdome 16: Darius vs Ace! on 11/9/2024 3:40:15 PM
So allow me to start off by saying that I adored the intro! The ThunderDome being reduced to anarchy while a screaming lard sack desperately grabs for a wet noodle? Every time he grabs Darius, he slips through his fingers. Meanwhile, Darius desperately smacking at Ace with no apparent effect? That’s sure to grab the attention of at least a few of the more easily distracted degenerates.
Story A: The story starts off grounded in reality, with the main character starving and accepting charity from a religious missionary. It immediately takes a dark turn in a disturbing manner when the protagonist wakes up mutilated in a dark cell. Sometimes, the immediate shift in surroundings can be jarring, but this was actually a smooth, effective method.
What I particularly liked about this story was the descriptions throughout the story, first of the character’s torment, and then of his past. The author does a fantastic job of detailing how the protagonist is feeling both physically and emotionally, without rambling on or breaking the flow of the story.
The shift from him calling himself by his name and mourning, to passively accepting the torment and referring to himself as his number was something I thought was clever. As in some other stories, it’s a good way of establishing that the protagonist has in a way “given up” and adapted to his environment.
Then the demon? More on her in a second, but what I found powerful here is that he is given the choice to remain a victim of his environment (which is something he had been going through long before he got taken prisoner, if his family members are any indication) or to fight back and accept the pain that comes with that. The fact that he immediately is referred to as Isaac immediately following his decision to strike back further underlines his choice.
The only thing I can say I didn’t like was the lack of clarification. Who is this demon? Who is this cult?? Why did they kidnap him? Why is she offering him a deal? I understand that this is meant to be a short story, and there’s only so much you can put into 2,000 words, but considering this story was only a little over 1,700 words, you could’ve used the last couple hundred to establish some basic motivation, at the very least.
Story B: So I also enjoyed this one. The character development in this story was stronger, with Eli the protagonist, his emotions are described just as well, and his motivations are more fleshed out. His Uncle Ben is also built up as a strong character, a type of anchor for the protagonist to cling to in this rocky stage of his life. Chris, who has gone missing, is described so well that I could honestly picture her in my mind’s eye
The description of the sea being stormy and rocky, the way it was described felt like a reflection of the protagonist's own emotional state. Impressive.
The twist at the end where it turns out his Uncle was lying to help him feel better leaves the story on a cliffhanger, as we don’t know exactly how the protagonist is going to react to the sight of his friend washing up on shore.
It was a very hard decision to make, as both stories are worthy of praise. Ultimately, I'm going to have to throw my vote in for Story B.
Psycho killer! Qu'est-ce que c'est? on 11/9/2024 1:55:23 AM
Well my main character in Terrorist was commended for having a strong voice.
Weird Faggotry vs Weird Autism, Round #447 on 11/8/2024 6:03:22 PM
You know what? Fuck it. Can Darius and I get a rematch in the ThunderDome to settle this?
Weird Faggotry vs Weird Autism, Round #447 on 11/8/2024 5:59:00 PM
I was saying 2016 was great cause my daughter was born that year.
Weird Faggotry vs Weird Autism, Round #447 on 11/8/2024 5:57:22 PM
Nah I'm still in my late 20s lol. I wasn't even drinking age when my kid was born.
Weird Faggotry vs Weird Autism, Round #447 on 11/8/2024 5:56:11 PM
Eh. I made one error.
Weird Faggotry vs Weird Autism, Round #447 on 11/8/2024 5:51:48 PM
As for the rest of it, meh. I'm just pointing out that if my girlfriend was to die of sepsis, at least she'sgonna have sympathy instead of having rocks thrown at her.
Weird Faggotry vs Weird Autism, Round #447 on 11/8/2024 5:50:31 PM
Yeah that was a typo. I meant to say "married" hence the reference to adultery