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Warden

Don't get distracted!

The target has been decided. The deadline has been set. All that is left is for you, Adam Finch, assassin extraordinaire, to execute your mission. Success is inevitable. Because you are weapon made flesh, and nothing will stop you from completing your mis- Oh! Look! A story-game!!

There are 5 endings: 'Double kill', 'War in the shadows', 'Retiree rescue', 'Kiss of death' and 'Who let him cook?!'.

Submitted for End Master's Prompt Contest 4 for the prompt of: 'A story involving being an assassin'

Ignis and Aero

Aero, a 14-year-old inhabitant of the village of Albritton, wants nothing more than to read his enthralling storybooks in peace. When he hears of a Golem wandering in the forests near his village, he is more than happy to let the professionals deal with it, while staying within the comfort of his home.

Unfortunately for him, his adventurous brother, Ignis, has other plans.

Author's note: If you want to collect all endings, then there are six of them: The Wise, The Mourner, The Cleaner, The Knight, The Skeptic and The Magician. Certain choices don't have immediate effects but may influence the endings. Also, certain endings can be reached through multiple different paths.

Submitted for Sherbet's Summer's End Synergy Contest.

Special thanks to mrcrimsonclean for proof reading :]

I'm not too well-read on history so I actually didn't know about that letter. Now I'm glad that he never reached our shores.

Should the character have knowledge of the science or no? If your character has a background that allows them to know these details, then it makes sense for them to pass on what they know to the reader. If not, then leaving it abstract should be fine. Conversely, if you want the readers to know about the technical stuff, make your narrator or a supporting character technically knowledgeable and provide exposition through their POV. Regardless, as an author, you should know how your world works. The more detailed, the better. You should also remember that you don't necessarily need to express everything you know about the world to your readers. Stick to what is relevant to the plot and make sure that knowledge is being delivered by someone who has reason to know said knowledge. That's my style of writing anyway.

Real Indian from real India here! Columbus was a twat.

You weren't supposed to say that first part out loud...

Very cool art! :D

Negative feedback is a good way for a writer to grow. If you don't care about becoming better at writing, you should probably just ignore all the negative reviews. Me personally, I just keep my emotions aside and try to implement any advice I receive from such comments as well as I can. As for different writing styles, variety is the spice of life! If everyone wrote the exact same way, this site would be pretty boring. I think a picture based CYOA would be a great read (look? I don't know). Just be sure to test it well and make sure the pictures aren't oversized or too tiny I guess.

Welcome to the site! :]

Might I redirect you to the Thunderdome thread in the News & Updates section of the forum? That's where all the action is at right now.

Voting for Story A.

These are both good stories but I prefer Story A as it seemed to have more world building. It's made abundantly clear that the city was really the only option and it was a wall that Sethra had to breach if she wanted to save her daughter. The descriptions of other abandoned settlements contributes to and builds this idea up well.

In contrast, story B reads more like it should've been a CYOA. The main character makes a beeline for the escape shuttles, but I feel like there should've been more options to be considered before that course of action was decided upon. It definitely felt like the word limit might have worked against it.

Regardless, this was quite the battle. I'm glad to have borne witness to it.

The anatomy of this abomination confuses me. D:

At least it ain't a mind goblin...